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After her parents die attempting to reach quarantine a teenage girl takes refuge from a pandemic in a valley where she is set upon by a predatory man desperate to save his own daughter at all costs.
The logline is confusing.If her parents were trying to reach quarantine then they were infected, was she exposed to the diseases and infected as well or isolated from them?What other description (less generic) than "...a teenage girl..." can you give the MC?Is the inciting incident the man chasing hRead more
The logline is confusing.
If her parents were trying to reach quarantine then they were infected, was she exposed to the diseases and infected as well or isolated from them?
What other description (less generic) than “…a teenage girl…” can you give the MC?
Is the inciting incident the man chasing her? If so, the first half of the logline can be cut.
What does “…predatory man…” mean? Is he hunting her? Or does he want to catch up with her to convince her to help him?
How will him catching the girl help save his daughter?
Lastly, what is her goal? To survive? If so how long for? In what way will she survive? Without specific detail on how she plans to survive, the goal is not clear – she could keep on surviving for years, what’s the end game? Possibly reaching a safe heaven clear of the pandemic.
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The more impactful the inciting incident, the more compelling the plot as a whole. Best to make the inciting incident 'hit close to home' and make the stakes personal, delaying the involvement of a family member/loved one will only delay the association of primal needs for the main character. The adRead more
The more impactful the inciting incident, the more compelling the plot as a whole. Best to make the inciting incident ‘hit close to home’ and make the stakes personal, delaying the involvement of a family member/loved one will only delay the association of primal needs for the main character.
See lessThe added complication in act 2 could be the discovery of a life threat to the abductees, which raises the stakes even higher – no one ever complains that a movie has too high a stakes…
A highly cultivated test subject flees the clutches of a CIA organization and must determine the purpose of his program while evading capture from government officials.
I beg to differ.I believe The Bourn Identity is unique in that it opens on the inciting incident - the MC waking up with amnesia on a strange boat in the middle of the ocean. This unusual set of circumstances, for me anyhow, is really what starts him off on his quest to figure out where he came fromRead more
I beg to differ.
I believe The Bourn Identity is unique in that it opens on the inciting incident – the MC waking up with amnesia on a strange boat in the middle of the ocean. This unusual set of circumstances, for me anyhow, is really what starts him off on his quest to figure out where he came from and what he was doing – his goal. Him discovering his skills and true identity come as a result of his quest for answers.
Therefor:
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