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A rag-tag group of technologically challenged small towners try to thwart a one ship alien invasion.
This describes a situation, not a plot - the primary function of a logline.Best to focus on one main character, not an arbitrary number of individuals. Who specifical will this story be about? And what specifically must they achieve?? How will they thwart the invasion?Check out the Training tab on tRead more
This describes a situation, not a plot – the primary function of a logline.
Best to focus on one main character, not an arbitrary number of individuals. Who specifical will this story be about? And what specifically must they achieve?? How will they thwart the invasion?
Check out the Training tab on the top bar for more details.
See lessShe has a bright future, but when her boyfriend gets caught up in an experiment with murderous implications, she must find him, survive his brainwashed mind, and do whatever it takes to bring him home.
Agreed with Richiev. Think of a logline as a way to describe the major events of your story, this means it needs clarity and specific detail otherwise it could be describing any number of stories. Check out the 'Training' tab on the top bar of this website for more information about loglines. In theRead more
Agreed with Richiev.
Think of a logline as a way to describe the major events of your story, this means it needs clarity and specific detail otherwise it could be describing any number of stories.
Check out the ‘Training’ tab on the top bar of this website for more information about loglines.
In the mean time identify the exact event that motivates her to take action – the inciting incident. Perhaps also reconsider her goal, instead of bringing him back home, why? not save his life? Life and death is far more compelling than living arrangments.
See lessWhen a zombie virus infects a small Southern town, a pregnant teen must fight the undead while hiding her condition from her conservative family.
Considering the many Zombie movies already on offer, what will stand out is a twist on the tropes of the genre. In this case, you have a pregnant teenager as the undead fighting extraordinaire MC. Pregnancy could be a "hook", as the handicap of carrying a big belly could prove interesting, not forgeRead more
Considering the many Zombie movies already on offer, what will stand out is a twist on the tropes of the genre. In this case, you have a pregnant teenager as the undead fighting extraordinaire MC. Pregnancy could be a “hook”, as the handicap of carrying a big belly could prove interesting, not forgetting that she must protect her unborn child. However, I’m not sure this is enough to get the concept over the much needed “hook” edge. The concept may need something in addition, for it to stand out in such a crowded marketplace.
As the genre is so well known already, you can drop the first clause altogether, and simply replace it with; After a Zombie outbreak…
Otherwise agreed with the other comments, hiding her pregnancy doesn’t compare with staying alive in terms of stakes.
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