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[Revisedx2] For refusing to buy more catnip, a vengeful cat calls upon the dark arts to end an insensitive mother’s career.
This logline?has been re draft?three times, but still fails to describe a logical set of events that make up a clear concept. How can a cat have a human mother? Or is the mother a cat as well? If the mother is a cat how can she work? Or is this an animal world such as in The Fantastic Mr Fox? I getRead more
This logline?has been re draft?three times, but still fails to describe a logical set of events that make up a clear concept.
How can a cat have a human mother? Or is the mother a cat as well? If the mother is a cat how can she work? Or is this an animal world such as in The Fantastic Mr Fox?
I get what you’re trying to do with the daughter turning herself into a cat to get back at the mother, but as previously noted the basic logic at the core of your concept isn’t clear. Secondly the stakes are low, what’s the worst that will happen should the cat/daughter fail to change the mother? She’ll resent her mother and learn to appreciate her only once she is an adult her self – just like 99% of teenagers now days? Point is, what else can you have happen that would increase the stakes for the cat/daughter?
See lessAfter a newly engaged woman realizes she has no friends to invite to her wedding, she sets out to make some adult friendships while balancing a crappy job and her own awkwardness.
Agreed with the above. One way you could differentiate it from I Love You Man, is to give her a big character flaw that would increase her obstacle of getting friends. Think of Seven of Nine from Star Trek Voyager getting married, how hard would it be for a former Borg to get friends over for her weRead more
Agreed with the above.
One way you could differentiate it from I Love You Man, is to give her a big character flaw that would increase her obstacle of getting friends. Think of Seven of Nine from Star Trek Voyager getting married, how hard would it be for a former Borg to get friends over for her wedding?
What if your MC is a known sociopath, or better yet a former serial killer – good luck getting anyone to attend her wedding.
See lessA migrant worker has to return back home unexpectedly after 5 years to look after his child when he finds out his wife has eloped with a stranger and all his savings. On the quest while finding his wife, he finds out that the child actually is not his own son.
As it is now the logline reads more like a series of events in a typical soap - lots of melodrama very little stakes. Once he learns she cheated on him and took off with the money, why does he care about her? Let her go and move on I say, more so once he (somehow) discovers the kid isn't his. The drRead more
As it is now the logline reads more like a series of events in a typical soap – lots of melodrama very little stakes. Once he learns she cheated on him and took off with the money, why does he care about her? Let her go and move on I say, more so once he (somehow) discovers the kid isn’t his. The dramatic impact is greater than the stake and therefore it comes across as melodrama not drama.
To solve this best you focus the logline, and subsequently the concept, on one goal – either he wants the wife back or the money or the kid. All the rest can be obstacles delegated to expansion in the synopsis.
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