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When the lands fairest Bride spurns an Evil Prince, he kills her father and takes her throne; but aid arrives for lone Princess from someone she never knew: her exiled mother.
Agreed with Moses, the plot is unclear and the wording is confusing. In addition it describes a deux ex machine ending - The magical mother meraculasly appears at the end to save the day. This is not as a direct result of the main character's action. Could you change it so that the princess solves tRead more
Agreed with Moses, the plot is unclear and the wording is confusing. In addition it describes a deux ex machine ending – The magical mother meraculasly appears at the end to save the day.
See lessThis is not as a direct result of the main character’s action.
Could you change it so that the princess solves the problem herself?
A contentedly married woman must face the truth about her marriage when the body of her husband’s lover, who fell to her death in a glacier 50 years ago, is discovered.
Havnt seen this one so can't comment on the logline's relation to the film. However as an objective reader I have to say the concept sounds dull, is this a good film? About the logline, her coming to terms with the truth about her husband's feelings for the ex, is an internal process with seeminglyRead more
Havnt seen this one so can’t comment on the logline’s relation to the film. However as an objective reader I have to say the concept sounds dull, is this a good film?
About the logline, her coming to terms with the truth about her husband’s feelings for the ex, is an internal process with seemingly little impact on the world around her. Perhaps that’s why it sounds boring to me. Is there anything else she does that made her story more compelling?
See lessA young NSA Agent impersonates a government minister at a secret meeting on the global arms trade to terrorists. But when masked gunmen storm the building, their target is not the minister he impersonates, but the NSA Agent himself.
Essentialy the under cover agent discovers that his agency is after him. That's your hook, but I don't think your logline is really expressing this dramatically enough. The whole first sentence can be cut, as it doesn't describe the main plot, all you need to write is: After and under cover CIA agenRead more
Essentialy the under cover agent discovers that his agency is after him. That’s your hook, but I don’t think your logline is really expressing this dramatically enough. The whole first sentence can be cut, as it doesn’t describe the main plot, all you need to write is:
After and under cover CIA agent on a mission is targeted by his fellow operatives he must?
The specifics of his initial mission are unimportant as the inciting incident is the CIA’s attempt on his life. I changed it to CIA as they would likely be more inclined to undertake such operations.
Problem is you didn’t describe the goal, after he realises?that they are after him what MUST he do? This is a crucial element of a logline and needs to be described.
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