1. Posted: July 26, 2016In:

    After she’s betrayed doing a one time mission for the government, a broke data smuggler must decode the data packet encrypted in her brain to use as a bargaining chip for her life.

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    The concept is getting clearer, but the structure betrays you sir or ma'am. Why not mention the government framing her earlier as the inciting incident, and then describe how she?reacts to this . After being framed by her handler a data transport agent must ?access the data stored in her head in ordRead more

    The concept is getting clearer, but the structure betrays you sir or ma’am.

    Why not mention the government framing her earlier as the inciting incident, and then describe how she?reacts to this .
    After being framed by her handler a data transport agent must ?access the data stored in her head in order to save her life.

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  2. Posted: July 26, 2016In:

    When an honest criminal lawyer is tempted by a lucrative one time drug deal only to have it go sour, he must fight to save the woman he loves from the revenge of a merciless cartel.

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    I haven't seen or heard of this film until your logline, possibly for a reason... It sounds as if the MC is mostly a reactive character instead of pro active one, and that's possibly why it didn't work very well. One would think they would have made sure to adapt the story to work better for the scrRead more

    I haven’t seen or heard of this film until your logline, possibly for a reason…

    It sounds as if the MC is mostly a reactive character instead of pro active one, and that’s possibly why it didn’t work very well.

    One would think they would have made sure to adapt the story to work better for the screen.
    Guess not.

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  3. Posted: July 24, 2016In:

    A French bisexual woman likes to sleep with her victims before she eats them. When the zombies attack, she is faced with a moral dilemma.

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    Agreed with all the above comments. Also, I would find it hard to empathise with a main character who eats people - humans or zombies she's a horrible person! What redeeming qualities does she have to make her a potentially likeable character, if possible that is, I just can't imagine it happening.

    Agreed with all the above comments.

    Also, I would find it hard to empathise with a main character who eats people – humans or zombies she’s a horrible person!

    What redeeming qualities does she have to make her a potentially likeable character, if possible that is, I just can’t imagine it happening.

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