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When people in town start disappearing, a young orphan woman, searching for her parents is attacked by an alien, she discovers her father’s true origins may not be from earth.
Is the inciting incident the town folk's murder or her being attacked by aliens? Loglines are about one plot, the 'A' plot, so best to describe one inciting incident. Secondly, as a result of her discovering that she is part alien, what does she need to achieve? The answer to this will be her goal,Read more
Is the inciting incident the town folk’s murder or her being attacked by aliens?
Loglines are about one plot, the ‘A’ plot, so best to describe one inciting incident.
Secondly, as a result of her discovering that she is part alien, what does she need to achieve?
See lessThe answer to this will be her goal, which is a crucial plot element currently missing in the logline.
When a nice holiday cruise turns bloody, a detective is able to eliminate the murderer after his son surrenders himself to lead the detective straight to her.
This sentence is confusing, I'm not sure who does what and why. Who is the main character? What is their inciting incident? What is their goal?
This sentence is confusing, I’m not sure who does what and why.
Who is the main character?
See lessWhat is their inciting incident?
What is their goal?
A soft-hearted young woman determined to find her birth parents stumbles on a deadly alien species that may hold the key to her origin.
In the revised version of the logline the death of the stepfather is described as the inciting incident. However, I don't see how that would necessarily motivate her to do so, she knew that her biological parents are somewhere away from her before he died so why is it imperative she find her biologiRead more
In the revised version of the logline the death of the stepfather is described as the inciting incident. However, I don’t see how that would necessarily motivate her to do so, she knew that her biological parents are somewhere away from her before he died so why is it imperative she find her biological parents now?
If she is unable to take care of her self and needs a guardian, then what makes her think she can go on the journey to find her parents? The logic doesn’t add up in this instance. However, if she were to be young enough for the authorities to put her in foster care, and in order to avoid this she seeks out her biological parents then her motivation is clear.
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