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When an attention seeking YouTube prankster is scammed, he uses his pranking skills to blackmail a crazy car salesman, but enters a darker world of violence and murder.
Hi Wayne. All previous comments to your last draft of this logline still apply. All the best.
Hi Wayne.
All previous comments to your last draft of this logline still apply.
All the best.
See lessWhen his daughter commits suicide after witnessing her ex-con boyfriend shot to death, a father-before-a-cop helps Internal Affairs investigators in a sting operation to nail the dirty cops responsible.
Agreed with the above comments. I think that the main character needs a greater obstacle, if he is working with a police department he has a lot of resources at his disposal. How hard will it be? Sure there are some corrupt individuals but he's got a bunch of armed men and women working with him, exRead more
Agreed with the above comments.
I think that the main character needs a greater obstacle, if he is working with a police department he has a lot of resources at his disposal. How hard will it be? Sure there are some corrupt individuals but he’s got a bunch of armed men and women working with him, except for the occasional difficult interview there’s not much in ways of conflict and hardship.
What if the father is a former cop because he got shot on duty and is now wheelchair bound? This way he has a major physical obstacle to get over in his way to justice. I would even take it one step further and suggest that the police are so corrupt that no department is willing to investigate the case, and he is left on his own to uncover the corruption and find the culprit. If you take on board DPG and Richiev’s advise to keep the daughter alive then she could be his right hand, and aid him when he needs an able bodied person.
See lessA schizophrenic ex-serviceman wants to revenge his imaginary wife and her lover!
The 'big reveal' is a cliche that has been used many times - 'it was all a dream'... If you want to tell a story about a person with?schizophrenia, perhaps try to come up with another way of dealing with the imaginary v real element. What if he is aware of the imaginary people being imaginary? WhatRead more
The ‘big reveal’ is a cliche that has been used many times – ‘it was all a dream’…
If you want to tell a story about a person with?schizophrenia, perhaps try to come up with another way of dealing with the imaginary v real element. What if he is aware of the imaginary people being imaginary? What if he’s fallen in love with an imaginary woman and prefers her over his wife?
I don’t mean to be a downer, but the idea of a “big” reveal in the end that it was all in his head has been done so many times to the point that?it may work against you.
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