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A young man with a dark past is trying everything to stay sane until she sends him into a deep darkness that hurts anyone that gets in his way.
Who is she? And what does she do? It reads as if what this 'she' did to him is his inciting incident, best to start on that and?describe the event in detail. The concept currently lacks a dramatic drive, what is the young man's goal?
Who is she? And what does she do?
It reads as if what this ‘she’ did to him is his inciting incident, best to start on that and?describe the event in detail.
The concept currently lacks a dramatic drive, what is the young man’s goal?
See lessA down on his luck bounty hunter becomes the star of his own reality TV show, but fame is not all it’s cracked up to be, and could even stop him from catching his long time nemesis.
This sounds like a good premise for a comedy, but the plot is vague. What does "...fame is not all it?s cracked up to be?" mean? This sounds like the inciting incident, but lacks detail. What is it that happens to him specifically??Ideally this would relate to his goal of catching the nemesis.
This sounds like a good premise for a comedy, but the plot is vague.
What does “…fame is not all it?s cracked up to be?” mean? This sounds like the inciting incident, but lacks detail. What is it that happens to him specifically??Ideally this would relate to his goal of catching the nemesis.
See lessWhen a couple and six strangers are trapped in an outback pub by a swarm of genetically engineered flying soldiers, they must fight for their lives, but first they must work out who or what is the real menace.
The last clause in the logline can be cut, best to focus on the goal and main action in the plot. Figuring out who sent the soldiers is a lesser action, that's taken early on in the story, than fighting them Who is the main character? Is it the couple? Or the wife? Or the husband? If you could speciRead more
The last clause in the logline can be cut, best to focus on the goal and main action in the plot. Figuring out who sent the soldiers is a lesser action, that’s taken early on in the story, than fighting them
Who is the main character? Is it the couple? Or the wife? Or the husband? If you could specify one it would help clear up the plot a bit more.
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