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After thugs peed on his beloved rug, an affable loser, through a case of mistaken identity gets caught up in a kidnapping case, which he must solve.“`
Agreed with the comments above, I think it's safe to say that their cult following will retain the studio's interest in their work for years to come.I would ad in an element to raise the stakes by mentioning the German Anarchists who threaten his life. I.e: After thugs urinate on his beloved rug inRead more
Agreed with the comments above, I think it’s safe to say that their cult following will retain the studio’s interest in their work for years to come.
I would ad in an element to raise the stakes by mentioning the German Anarchists who threaten his life.
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After thugs urinate on his beloved rug in a case of mistaken identity, an affable stoner gets embroiled in a kidnapping caper he must solve to prevent the murderous kidnapper coming after him.
When a planet in another galaxy is faced with annihilation, a plan hatches to have Franklin, an ordinary boy with extraordinary abilities from earth, help save the planet from destruction from the evil being known as Xero.
Consider the logic flaw proposed in the first post by DPG. Why would a boy with, super powers of some sort,? go elsewhere to solve problems when he could easily be needed to do the same here? Perhaps they need to kidnap the boy, essentially leave him no choice? Other wise the basis of the concept maRead more
Consider the logic flaw proposed in the first post by DPG. Why would a boy with, super powers of some sort,? go elsewhere to solve problems when he could easily be needed to do the same here?
Perhaps they need to kidnap the boy, essentially leave him no choice? Other wise the basis of the concept make little sense.
Regardless the logic flaw, best to describe the story elements in specific terms – What exactly can the boy do? What are his abilities?
Lastly, it sounds like when told from the boys point of view the story is more interesting than from any other character’s. If indeed he is the main character, best to re draft the logline to reflect that. In order to do this, the logline will need to describe (in specific terms) what sets him off on his journey and what his goal is.
See lessWhen two young lovers get a motorboat and escape on a romantic weekend adventure, a fatal mistake leaves them stranded on a dark island outside of Stockholm for at least the night.
Agreed with the above. In addition though, the inciting incident is the "...fatal mistake..." but due to its generic description the specific nature of it is un clear. Best to specify what the event was, so it is clear how and why the main characters are forced into the situation they end up in. HopRead more
Agreed with the above.
In addition though, the inciting incident is the “…fatal mistake…” but due to its generic description the specific nature of it is un clear. Best to specify what the event was, so it is clear how and why the main characters are forced into the situation they end up in.
Hope this helps.
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