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After a mega storm a single mum rush home to find her teenage daughter missing and an escaped prisoner waiting. She must help him escape to find out what he has done with her daughter.
Agreed with the above about mentioning the storm. The only times I find the setting placed well in a logline is when it plays a vital part in the plot (Life Of Pie as an example).Presumably an escaped prisoner would draw more police presence out and about to search for him so that alone will raise tRead more
Agreed with the above about mentioning the storm. The only times I find the setting placed well in a logline is when it plays a vital part in the plot (Life Of Pie as an example).
Presumably an escaped prisoner would draw more police presence out and about to search for him so that alone will raise the risk for her to succeed. I think best to describe in specific terms what the prisoner wants her to do for him i.e: drive him to the state border, smuggle him in her car out of town or kill an enemy or witness.
Hope this helps.
See lessA cold and withdrawn assassin, who uses her apocalyptic visions of the future to hunt targets in the present before they become a threat, finds herself hunted by a deadly, yet emotionally unstable, foe, and, in her bid to survive, she uncovers a future she never could have foreseen.
The lack of plot specific details and abundance of words make this logline for a difficult read. Perhaps try re drafting the logline and include only the main character description of her character flaw, her inciting incident and goal. Then if there is room to spare add in additional information. HoRead more
The lack of plot specific details and abundance of words make this logline for a difficult read.
Perhaps try re drafting the logline and include only the main character description of her character flaw, her inciting incident and goal.
Then if there is room to spare add in additional information.
Hope this helps.
See lessCopernicus’ Secret: It takes a lifetime for Nicolaus Copernicus to re-write our understanding of the Universe but plagued by self-doubt and fear, he’s unwilling to publish until a Protestant Professor risks imprisonment to convince him to publish.
I would normally agree with the idea that clear stakes as derived from a do or die situation should be preferenced. However, in this instance I seam to find the subject matter intriguing when drawing an analogy to present day science V religion arguments regardless the data specific implications. AnRead more
I would normally agree with the idea that clear stakes as derived from a do or die situation should be preferenced. However, in this instance I seam to find the subject matter intriguing when drawing an analogy to present day science V religion arguments regardless the data specific implications. Any data driven scientific research that is opposed by a belief system of sorts can be seen as an analogy for example stem cell research being delayed? for decades by religious groups, genetic modifications in food sources being resisted by people who believe it is wrong and anti immunization groups.
It is the personal struggles that will be dramatized in Copernicus’ story that will make it a compelling journey and the grand meaning of the argument that will make it relevant for today’s audiences.
The logline itself though lacks a clear definition of the plot and stakes at hand. Best to specify the inciting incident and goal for Copernicus and clearly mention the stakes.
Hope this helps.
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