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On the brink of a new type of technological and societal global war, a charismatic figure rises through the political sphere using Social Media as he faces adversity from those who would profit from a war succeeding.
The wording is a bit strange in this logline. It's not necessary to describe (and waste valuable logline real estate...) the families, simply state when AI takes over most jobs. The stakes aren't clear, how is the world in danger? Sure, the job market will change but why does the world need to be unRead more
The wording is a bit strange in this logline.
It’s not necessary to describe (and waste valuable logline real estate…) the families, simply state when AI takes over most jobs. The stakes aren’t clear, how is the world in danger? Sure, the job market will change but why does the world need to be united? And what does unit the world mean?? And why this one guy? What is it about this problem that motivates him more than anyone else?
See lessFamine in rural Ireland forces a loving father to make a dark deal with a pagan spiritual entity to feed his family. When the bond is broken he must choose between losing his child or his soul to settle his debt.
I suggest you think of a logline as a brief description of the major plot points in a story. In other words, don't try and tell your story or expand on any particular detail in a logline. Check out the 'Formula' tab on the top bar to get a better understanding of logline basics. I would re write theRead more
I suggest you think of a logline as a brief description of the major plot points in a story. In other words, don’t try and tell your story or expand on any particular detail in a logline.
Check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar to get a better understanding of logline basics.
I would re write the above as:
After a famine hits their Irish village, a father must strike a deal with a demon in order to feed his family.
Adjectives hardly, if ever, add to a logline – it’s the unique combination of subject matter, action and goals that will make the concept sound interesting.
See lessA simple disagreement in a gas station results in a store manager being brutally murdered. A dubious employee can’t accept the official explanation and asks one too many questions, sparking a series of events that could ruin him completely.
Love your user name by the way... This is too long and lacks detail. Why is the employee so adamant to find the killer? Is the employee a family member? What makes the murder personal for him? What's the end game for the employee? What MUST he achieve, or die trying, by the end of the story?
Love your user name by the way…
This is too long and lacks detail. Why is the employee so adamant to find the killer? Is the employee a family member? What makes the murder personal for him? What’s the end game for the employee? What MUST he achieve, or die trying, by the end of the story?
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