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A directionless raft guide enlists his professional athlete friends to help him find a mysterious woman in the forest who called upon him to save her, then disappeared.
Good point raised by David. Inciting incident should precede the action.
Good point raised by David.
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Mistaken as Earth’s leader, due to his popularity on social media, a washed up actor is abducted by aliens to help prove humanity is worth saving from imminent destruction.
This essentially reads as a courtroom drama set in space. That was the hook for me not the character or how he got to be in space. As such I don't think the whole explanation of the MC being a popular social media figure needs to be included. The premise sounds as if it could have a lot of potentialRead more
This essentially reads as a courtroom drama set in space. That was the hook for me not the character or how he got to be in space.
As such I don’t think the whole explanation of the MC being a popular social media figure needs to be included.
The premise sounds as if it could have a lot of potential but in my mind needs work. Perhaps best to research all the successful court room drama films you can think of and analyse their structure and archetypes. A Few Good Men, And Justice For All, The Rain Maker and Erin Brockovich come to mind.
Looking at these it seams as if most of the action or the interesting action at least happened to the lawyers outside the court room.
Hope this helps.
See lessA directionless raft guide enlists his professional athlete friends to help him find a mysterious woman in the forest who called upon him to save her, then disappeared.
Agreed with the above stakes, obstacle and plot are vague and appear loosely connected. I get the "...directionless..." description as an ironic obstacle for a guide to have. Similar to the Monty Python sketch about a 100 meter dash for people with no sense of direction, all be it a comedy, after thRead more
Agreed with the above stakes, obstacle and plot are vague and appear loosely connected.
I get the “…directionless…” description as an ironic obstacle for a guide to have. Similar to the Monty Python sketch about a 100 meter dash for people with no sense of direction, all be it a comedy, after the gun shot they all take off in all directions but forward.
However there is a logic flaw as most raft guides simply follow the direction of flow in the river with no need for much navigational skills, I may be wrong though not sure how that works exactly.
Regardless as DPG pointed out there is no observable character flaw for the MC to overcome in their journey.
Lastly the logline reads as if it is suppose to be a super natural thriller set in nature but comes across as confusing instead. If the mysterious woman is a spirit or monster then maybe better to define her as such.
Hope this helps.
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