Have an account? Sign In Now
Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.
Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.
With help taking too long, A hopeless romantic races against time to save his fiance on the 74th floor of the South Tower on 9/11.
The MC has a clear goal and obvious high stakes this works well as a mechanism to drive the plot forward. However I just can't see how the story would make sense and how it wold fit into 110 minutes. I'm not sure about the exact timing of the events that took place in 911. Is this a story that happeRead more
The MC has a clear goal and obvious high stakes this works well as a mechanism to drive the plot forward. However I just can’t see how the story would make sense and how it wold fit into 110 minutes.
I’m not sure about the exact timing of the events that took place in 911.
Is this a story that happens in real time i.e 1 min of screen time equals 1 min of real world time? If so how much time was there between the impact and the tower falling?
Would he have been able to run up the stairs and save her? How much action is there for him to take on his way to the fianc? that won’t be repetitive enough to fill awhile act?
Hope this helps.
See lessIn a leisure female-only Utopia where sex is the only taboo, a willful girl must escape from her restrained community to join her lover who has been sent away.
We often have this discussion on Logline.it when a writer tries to justify as a creative choice the lack of clarity, logic, or a goal, stakes, antagonist and a journey. Alas the answer is always; a resounding yes! They are needed in most cases. Look at Tarantino's films closely and analyse them (I hRead more
We often have this discussion on Logline.it when a writer tries to justify as a creative choice the lack of clarity, logic, or a goal, stakes, antagonist and a journey.
Alas the answer is always; a resounding yes! They are needed in most cases.
Look at Tarantino’s films closely and analyse them (I have) liner story lines or not the MC in most cases had clear goals, high stakes antagonists and journeys.
Bottom line is if you want to sell a story to a producer he or she will have to see financial merit in it majority of audiences wanting to watch them as appose to the minority. For them to do so the story will have to comply with story conventions in order to reach a large enough audience. These conventions have been established and researched for a little over 3500 years so best to use them instead of reject them.
See lessAn insecure man whose soul communicates with other souls in the spiritual realm of dreams, will need to overcome his fears in order to find and bring back his sister?s soul whose body lies in a coma.
Perhaps describe him as a medium which implies he can communicate with spirits instead of the long description in the current draft. Also perhaps make the sister his twin it comes across as a higher stake. Lastly ti isn't clear from the logline whether he will travel into the spirit world to find thRead more
Perhaps describe him as a medium which implies he can communicate with spirits instead of the long description in the current draft.
Also perhaps make the sister his twin it comes across as a higher stake.
Lastly ti isn’t clear from the logline whether he will travel into the spirit world to find the sister or stay in the real world and just communicate with spirits. I think it would make for a more interesting story if he were to travel into the special world on a mission and undergo an adventure there al la’ Tron or Alice in Wonderland.
If this is the case then perhaps mention in the logline that he must travel into the spirit realm etc?
e.g
After his twin sister lapses into a coma, an insecure medium must travel across the spirit realm to rescue her sole and bring her back before the hospital takes her off life support.
Hope this helps.
See less