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When a vindictive cyber-terrorist steals nuclear activation codes, a distrusting special agent must use an experimental machine to enter his mind and retrieve them before he instigates a global conflict.
The stakes are plenty high with a nuke no explaining needed, what Richieve is suggesting is a way to make the stakes personal for the MC. Star Wars was not about the rebel alliance wining the war agains the Galactic Empire rather about Luke Skywalker's journey that related to the war. Indiana JonesRead more
The stakes are plenty high with a nuke no explaining needed, what Richieve is suggesting is a way to make the stakes personal for the MC.
Star Wars was not about the rebel alliance wining the war agains the Galactic Empire rather about Luke Skywalker’s journey that related to the war. Indiana Jones was not about the allies wining the war agains the Nazis rather it was about Indi’s journey that related to WW2.
When you have a good journey for the MC that is combined with high stakes that extended beyond the MC and their journey the story becomes a compelling experience for the audience.
In your original logline you specified an antagonist with a clear description “…vindictive cyber-terrorist…” but didn’t specify a MC with a clear description. Therefore the logline failed to structure a plot and describe a story because the reader couldn’t figure out who exactly was going to do what.
Hope this helps.
See lessWhen a vindictive cyber-terrorist steals nuclear activation codes, a distrusting special agent must use an experimental machine to enter his mind and retrieve them before he instigates a global conflict.
The stakes are plenty high with a nuke no explaining needed, what Richieve is suggesting is a way to make the stakes personal for the MC. Star Wars was not about the rebel alliance wining the war agains the Galactic Empire rather about Luke Skywalker's journey that related to the war. Indiana JonesRead more
The stakes are plenty high with a nuke no explaining needed, what Richieve is suggesting is a way to make the stakes personal for the MC.
Star Wars was not about the rebel alliance wining the war agains the Galactic Empire rather about Luke Skywalker’s journey that related to the war. Indiana Jones was not about the allies wining the war agains the Nazis rather it was about Indi’s journey that related to WW2.
When you have a good journey for the MC that is combined with high stakes that extended beyond the MC and their journey the story becomes a compelling experience for the audience.
In your original logline you specified an antagonist with a clear description “…vindictive cyber-terrorist…” but didn’t specify a MC with a clear description. Therefore the logline failed to structure a plot and describe a story because the reader couldn’t figure out who exactly was going to do what.
Hope this helps.
See lessWhen experimental mind control technology is stolen, a cold and ruthless assassin is hired to retrieve it and kill the thief, but the more he discovers, the more he realizes he stole it.
Sounds like the story and therefore logline should start with him realising his mind was taken over by someone else and he was forced to steal the device. This was an event that differs from the norm for him and forced him to take action. Hope this helps.
Sounds like the story and therefore logline should start with him realising his mind was taken over by someone else and he was forced to steal the device. This was an event that differs from the norm for him and forced him to take action.
Hope this helps.
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