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Spending months planning his wife's murder to make it look like suicide. A man comes home to find his wife has killed herself. He now has to prove he didn't do it.
"Why would someone go on the run after find their spouse had committed suicide?" - Good question, if he planned her murder prior to her suicide or not why would he be a suspect? The same plot hole exists whether or not he planned her murder as no one would know he was secretly planning to kill her.Read more
“Why would someone go on the run after find their spouse had committed suicide?” –
Good question, if he planned her murder prior to her suicide or not why would he be a suspect? The same plot hole exists whether or not he planned her murder as no one would know he was secretly planning to kill her. I was just trying to improve the logline using as much of your original concept.
“As with many logline it stay virtually in the first act and hints and the path and resolution.” – WRONG.
A logline describes a plot and a plot takes place over multiple acts.
An ideal log line:
Describes a MC and the inciting incident and goal – all in act 1
The Antagonist, obstacles and what the MC will do to achieve said goal – act 2
Hints at the resolution of both external and inner journey – act 3
A logline can be used to help structure a plot or sell a story depends on the writer and stage of development of the story.
If you are using it as a structure tool then you need to know what the plot is across all acts.
See lessIf you are pitching then a strong act 2 (the bulk of the film) will normally make the sale. This is because act one will hook the listeners interests but you need them to want to know more this will happen if there is a promise for a strong “more” i.e act 2. Then they will ask you to describe the concept in further detail.
Spending months planning his wife's murder to make it look like suicide. A man comes home to find his wife has killed herself. He now has to prove he didn't do it.
"Why would someone go on the run after find their spouse had committed suicide?" - Good question, if he planned her murder prior to her suicide or not why would he be a suspect? The same plot hole exists whether or not he planned her murder as no one would know he was secretly planning to kill her.Read more
“Why would someone go on the run after find their spouse had committed suicide?” –
Good question, if he planned her murder prior to her suicide or not why would he be a suspect? The same plot hole exists whether or not he planned her murder as no one would know he was secretly planning to kill her. I was just trying to improve the logline using as much of your original concept.
“As with many logline it stay virtually in the first act and hints and the path and resolution.” – WRONG.
A logline describes a plot and a plot takes place over multiple acts.
An ideal log line:
Describes a MC and the inciting incident and goal – all in act 1
The Antagonist, obstacles and what the MC will do to achieve said goal – act 2
Hints at the resolution of both external and inner journey – act 3
A logline can be used to help structure a plot or sell a story depends on the writer and stage of development of the story.
If you are using it as a structure tool then you need to know what the plot is across all acts.
See lessIf you are pitching then a strong act 2 (the bulk of the film) will normally make the sale. This is because act one will hook the listeners interests but you need them to want to know more this will happen if there is a promise for a strong “more” i.e act 2. Then they will ask you to describe the concept in further detail.
Spending months planning his wife's murder to make it look like suicide. A man comes home to find his wife has killed herself. He now has to prove he didn't do it.
The man's discovery of the suicide is his inciting incident all the descriptions prior to that are superfluous in the log line. You are trying to allude to the aspect of irony the story holds but in my mind it is confusing the A plot of him proving his innocence. Whether he did or didn't want her deRead more
The man’s discovery of the suicide is his inciting incident all the descriptions prior to that are superfluous in the log line. You are trying to allude to the aspect of irony the story holds but in my mind it is confusing the A plot of him proving his innocence.
Whether he did or didn’t want her dead he will still have to prove his innocence after she kills herself.
Therefore if his goal is to prove his innocence then I think the loglein should describe him the suicide discovery and his trying to prove himself innocent.
i.e:
After his wife commits suicide a man must go on the run and prove he is innocent of murder.
I think the irony of him wanting her dead would be better served if explained during a pitch or in a synopsis.
Hope this helps.
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