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In order to create a replacement ?Master Vampire? after his is accidentally killed, a perfectionist thrall has 48 hours to steal and consume the blood of 100 virgins from a mobile high-school blood bank, before he and his master's other sons' powers wain, and they succumb to mortality.
This reads much better as it's leaner, the stakes are clearer and a pacifist vampire sounds an interesting combination. It's similar in that sense to Brad Pitt's character from Interview with the Vampire. Whilst a pacifist vampire that refuse to kill and needs to rob a blood bank sounds interestingRead more
This reads much better as it’s leaner, the stakes are clearer and a pacifist vampire sounds an interesting combination. It’s similar in that sense to Brad Pitt’s character from Interview with the Vampire.
Whilst a pacifist vampire that refuse to kill and needs to rob a blood bank sounds interesting I still think that the stakes need to be directly related to the antagonist somehow. By doing this you put the act of stealing blood in a unity of action with that of defeating the bad guy and make it a far more compelling story.
“After his master is left for dead by a brutal hunter, a pacifist vampire?s servant must steal enough blood to prevent his family from being hunted as well.”
I get that servants a probably conventions of the vampire world but I still can’t shake the negative connotation to the word servant/thrall or maybe that’s just me. Is there a better position you can give him?
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In order to create a replacement ?Master Vampire? after his is accidentally killed, a perfectionist thrall has 48 hours to steal and consume the blood of 100 virgins from a mobile high-school blood bank, before he and his master's other sons' powers wain, and they succumb to mortality.
This reads much better as it's leaner, the stakes are clearer and a pacifist vampire sounds an interesting combination. It's similar in that sense to Brad Pitt's character from Interview with the Vampire. Whilst a pacifist vampire that refuse to kill and needs to rob a blood bank sounds interestingRead more
This reads much better as it’s leaner, the stakes are clearer and a pacifist vampire sounds an interesting combination. It’s similar in that sense to Brad Pitt’s character from Interview with the Vampire.
Whilst a pacifist vampire that refuse to kill and needs to rob a blood bank sounds interesting I still think that the stakes need to be directly related to the antagonist somehow. By doing this you put the act of stealing blood in a unity of action with that of defeating the bad guy and make it a far more compelling story.
“After his master is left for dead by a brutal hunter, a pacifist vampire?s servant must steal enough blood to prevent his family from being hunted as well.”
I get that servants a probably conventions of the vampire world but I still can’t shake the negative connotation to the word servant/thrall or maybe that’s just me. Is there a better position you can give him?
See lessLoyal butler, personal physician, immortal companion, eternal tennis partner…
When her prison transport plane crashes, a lawyer wrongfully accused of fraud, must avoid the FBI and escape from the vengeful husband who framed her to realize her dream.
Just re post an updated logline under the same conversation of the original post. Other wise it's counter productive and hogs the board.
Just re post an updated logline under the same conversation of the original post. Other wise it’s counter productive and hogs the board.
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