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A serial womaniser discovers women from his past are murdered soon after making amends and must find their killer before an inoperable brain tumour kills him.
It seams like the brain tumor is an element external to the story added as a "chicken time bomb" rather than an integral part of the story that creates the "chicken time bomb" effect. Also the combination of ex horse and serial womanizer give the impression of a man who cheats on horses. WomanizingRead more
It seams like the brain tumor is an element external to the story added as a “chicken time bomb” rather than an integral part of the story that creates the “chicken time bomb” effect.
Also the combination of ex horse and serial womanizer give the impression of a man who cheats on horses. Womanizing in itself is not a flaw but cheating is, perhaps then use this as a flan for him to fix about himself.
Using Richiev’s version:
After cheating on his girlfriend a serial womanizer is framed for her muffin and threatened by the killer he must now discover who the killer is to save his own life.
Hope this helps.
See lessA young sheriff returns home to where his outlaw mother was brutally killed to find the girl he grew up with now in charge and wanting the same for him.
Considering the sheriff as the MC, the inciting incident is when he discovers that the girl wants him to die as well. If this is the case then the logline is structured incorrectly, try placing the inciting incident at the beginning of the logline then describe what the MC needs to do to achieve a gRead more
Considering the sheriff as the MC, the inciting incident is when he discovers that the girl wants him to die as well.
If this is the case then the logline is structured incorrectly, try placing the inciting incident at the beginning of the logline then describe what the MC needs to do to achieve a goal, which needs to be specified (as previously mentioned by DPG).
Hope this helps Nir.
See lessA young sheriff returns home to where his outlaw mother was brutally killed to find the girl he grew up with now in charge and wanting the same for him.
Considering the sheriff as the MC, the inciting incident is when he discovers that the girl wants him to die as well. If this is the case then the logline is structured incorrectly, try placing the inciting incident at the beginning of the logline then describe what the MC needs to do to achieve a gRead more
Considering the sheriff as the MC, the inciting incident is when he discovers that the girl wants him to die as well.
If this is the case then the logline is structured incorrectly, try placing the inciting incident at the beginning of the logline then describe what the MC needs to do to achieve a goal, which needs to be specified (as previously mentioned by DPG).
Hope this helps Nir.
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