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2019. Mexico is plungded into a Civil War. American Forces help the Loyalist forces escape from the war. 2021. America has split, the North and the South are at war. The Ex-president Marcerella now is a general of the US Joint-Forces unit known as the 6th Army. The Suth are beginig to gain ground and head towards Washington. 2022. Washington once the Capital of America now a battle ground. General Marcerella is the 2nd in command of all US forces in Washington. A platoon of one of his companies lead by Captain Jamerson head towards a new tactic… Survive. During the Platons Patrol, they get into a firefight with some Marines from the Elite CSMC 12th "Phoenix" Regiment, when an unatural earthquake causes the West Atlantic Fault. The Platoon have a matter of Hours to reach the Extraction point to fly back to Fort Safe(white House) before the Earthquake kills them all. 2023. a years after the earthquake the 6th Army have been given a special mission which is to invade Mexico to stop Mexican reinforcements help the Confederate (republican) States of America.
Best to read up on the definition of a logline on the "write it" page here: https://loglines.org/howto/ Think of it as the (pardon the analogy) most well reduced sauce of your story, any further reduction will result in burning it. The point of a Logline is to outline the main character (MC) their oRead more
Best to read up on the definition of a logline on the “write it” page here: https://loglines.org/howto/
Think of it as the (pardon the analogy) most well reduced sauce of your story, any further reduction will result in burning it.
The point of a Logline is to outline the main character (MC) their over arching action throughout the plot, the main obstacles and the main antagonist (AN). Only the absolutely crucial detail should be included so a reader can understand what you story is about (genre, character and type of main struggle) and judge whether or not they want to pick it up and read the script or synopsis.
I often use a logline to help shape the bare essentials of a story and get rid of redundant characters, action and events during writing.
Hope this helps, Nir.
See lessThe death of their child prompts a grieving couple to perform a ritual that brings her back to life, but a violation of the ritual?s rules has horrific consequences for the couples friends and family.
I think in addition to the above comments you could possibly try to specify the obstacles a bit more to help define the force of evil. Ultimately if it is their re animated daughter that turns into a monster then they will be faced with a struggle against her. But if it is a different force of evilRead more
I think in addition to the above comments you could possibly try to specify the obstacles a bit more to help define the force of evil. Ultimately if it is their re animated daughter that turns into a monster then they will be faced with a struggle against her. But if it is a different force of evil in control of her body then they will be faced with a struggle against it, what ever it is.
It is the definition of this force they will struggle with that will help shape the plot.
I would also define the MCs better than they are now by this I mean give them names and jobs at least so we know who we are dealing with. Preferably define them as the last type of person to try using magic and prayer to add obstacles to the plot. Also ideally use their description to infer possible backstory that could relate to the mane plot.
e.g:
When stem-cell researchers Paul and Merry desperately revive their dead daughter and only child using an age old ritual. They miss read a portion of the ancient text and leave out a crucial ingredient resulting in the creation of a shape shifting monster that destroys the rest of their family.
Hope this helps, Nir.
See lessA group of friends come across a mysterious abandoned town in the middle of nowhere while on a roadtrip. When they decide to stop and explore, strange things start happening. A burned down school, homes left to rot, and an old asylum have them running from something they can't see. With more questions than answers, will the be able to escape the town, or will they too vanish like the residents of Culberson?
Not sure who the MC is, would be a good idea to clarify who they are as the protagonist description lacks detail. It reads as if this is a multi protagonist story though, by definition this requires all the protagonists to have the same journey. If this is the case it needs clarifying and reasoningRead more
Not sure who the MC is, would be a good idea to clarify who they are as the protagonist description lacks detail.
It reads as if this is a multi protagonist story though, by definition this requires all the protagonists to have the same journey. If this is the case it needs clarifying and reasoning by this I mean; why a road trip? A road trip to where? Are they a group of teens out for fun or a group of middle aged people re living their younger days? etc…
The location will define the characteristics of the story and much needed obstacles “a mysterious abandoned town in the middle of nowhere” is to vague to give a clear understanding of this. At the very least define a country and state so the readers know where they are and assign the required mental images accordingly.
Just as the MC is vague the AN is vague to (I like using one to define the other) is the bad guy; a ghost? an ancient monster? an angry pagan god? Un like the MC this doesn’t need to be exactly described rather clarified as to give the reader a better idea of the obstacles at hand. Not just the strange things they find like “homes left to rot” rather the force behind them.
All in all sounds like a relatively good premise for a low budget slasher.
Hope this helps Nir.
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