First off, I love the concept, great idea – but creating a scenario where people are mistaken for cops, but then having them evade the law is almost the exact opposite action I want to see from that set up. (I assume it is from the police that they “find themselves on the run” … and if not, please clarify in the logline who they are running from). I want to see these two guys FORCED into situations where they must continue posing as cops. Imagine they found themselves in the world of Training Day? They couldn’t reveal that they were cops or they’d get shot! No choice but to follow the case (whatever that is) all the way to the end!

By the above logline, it seems that the event is being mistaken for cops, and that the action is going on the run from the law. Adding that they had to take a crim to the station introduces a second event, but no resulting action. So lose one of the actions, and clarify why they have to go on the run.

Can the dilemma of a character choosing between dropping out of school or essentially neglecting “his” child sustain a feature length film? What are we actually seeing? Making a choice doesn’t take long on screen – thousands of choices get made in a regular film.

Also; by revealing in the logline that the child is not his, and the obligation to care for the child is removed, the stakes of your story drop away. (Not Suitable For Children, a recent Aussie film with similar themes, got around this by giving the protagonist testicular cancer – even though he wasn’t ready for it, his quest became about having a child before his testicle was removed, because he would never be able to after it was gone).