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After she is imbued with the power to kill with a touch, a grieving farmer must stop a trio of fundamentalists intent on recruiting her as the fourth "horseperson" of the apocalypse before they can end life on Earth.
I think what you're really indicating to me here is that the inciting incident I've described (the magic power being bestowed upon her) doesn't directly relate to her goal. So what I should really be indicating is that after she refuses to join their group - and having the knowledge of what they plaRead more
I think what you’re really indicating to me here is that the inciting incident I’ve described (the magic power being bestowed upon her) doesn’t directly relate to her goal.
So what I should really be indicating is that after she refuses to join their group – and having the knowledge of what they plan to do – that’s when she would be faced with the responsibility of stopping them.
I’ll rethink the logline. Cheers.
See lessWhen the woman that raised him is murdered a hitman turns states evidence against his employers and enters witness protection where he is sent back in time to post Civil War Texas, but it isn't long before his past and the future catches up with him.
Whilst the woman who raised him being murdered probably figures quite heavily into the way this film plays out, the real hook is the travelling back in time. So it feels like you should begin with "While in witness protection, a hitman turned states evidence is sent back in time to post Civil War TeRead more
Whilst the woman who raised him being murdered probably figures quite heavily into the way this film plays out, the real hook is the travelling back in time. So it feels like you should begin with “While in witness protection, a hitman turned states evidence is sent back in time to post Civil War Texas …”
See lessThe problem here is that the goal of your character is unclear. Is he trying to get back to his own time? Does he have to protect the town he’s arrived in from some bandits? What is the goal and what are the stakes once he’s arrived back in time?
Interesting concept for sure, great title.
After her inability to cope with her husband's death imbues her with the power to kill with a touch, an unassuming farmer must stop a trio of fundamentalists intent on recruiting her as the fourth "horseperson" of the apocalypse before they can implement their plan to end life on Earth.
I think you're right, particularly with your suggested revised first half. I'll re-post.
I think you’re right, particularly with your suggested revised first half. I’ll re-post.
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