1. Posted: August 26, 2014In:

    An undercover cop from a distant galaxy fights to save the human race and the woman he loves from an alien invasion set to destroy earth.

    Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai

    Who is he fighting?

    Who is he fighting?

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  2. Posted: August 26, 2014In:

    An undercover cop from a distant galaxy fights to save the human race and the woman he loves from an alien invasion set to destroy earth.

    Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai

    Who is he fighting?

    Who is he fighting?

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  3. Posted: August 23, 2014In:

    In order to create a replacement ?Master Vampire? after his is accidentally killed, a perfectionist thrall has 48 hours to steal and consume the blood of 100 virgins from a mobile high-school blood bank, before he and his master's other sons' powers wain, and they succumb to mortality.

    Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai

    Thanks so much for your help on this so far man. I hear what you're saying re: linking the antagonist to the goal / stakes, but I think it sounds clunky when I attempt it. I don't think "to prevent his family from being hunted as well" rolls off the tongue. Perhaps it just needs to be changed to "muRead more

    Thanks so much for your help on this so far man.

    I hear what you’re saying re: linking the antagonist to the goal / stakes, but I think it sounds clunky when I attempt it. I don’t think “to prevent his family from being hunted as well” rolls off the tongue. Perhaps it just needs to be changed to “must steal enough blood to protect his family” … more needed you reckon?

    Also – I can find another word that is less accurate to describe the character … but he is 100% a thrall, a servant, as per pretty standard vampiric lore. That’s what he is, and I’m OK with calling him servant for the sake of accurate communication, but I think anything else lies about the nature of his function in his world. Perhaps ‘caretaker’ could work?

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