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When a brilliant but unruly CIA agent is unexpectedly assigned to find a missing Chinese dissident, he soon realises all is not what it seems. Not knowing who to trust, his loyalties to friends, family and country are tested to the limit.
Why is the assignment unexpected? Is that not his department? Is he a file clerk, or not a field agent? Is the goal still to find the missing Chinese dissident? Or once he uncovers a conspiracy, does his goal change?
Why is the assignment unexpected? Is that not his department? Is he a file clerk, or not a field agent?
Is the goal still to find the missing Chinese dissident? Or once he uncovers a conspiracy, does his goal change?
See lessWhen their covers are blown on a mission to seduce Yugoslav President Marshal Tito, a nebbish diplomat must smuggle Marilyn Monroe, the US?s biggest movie star and newest spy, out of Yugoslavia before their blunder leads to all-out war.
"until you assign the action and goal to the logline" should read"until you assign the action and goal to the diplomat."
“until you assign the action and goal to the logline” should read”until you assign the action and goal to the diplomat.”
See lessWhen their covers are blown on a mission to seduce Yugoslav President Marshal Tito, a nebbish diplomat must smuggle Marilyn Monroe, the US?s biggest movie star and newest spy, out of Yugoslavia before their blunder leads to all-out war.
Good idea; good title, messy logline. I feel first and foremost, you need to trim this down. Keep it focused on your protagonist - what is the diplomat's flaw? By spending so much time on the setup, the logline becomes unbalanced, and it feels like the protagonist is going to Marilyn; until you assiRead more
Good idea; good title, messy logline.
I feel first and foremost, you need to trim this down. Keep it focused on your protagonist – what is the diplomat’s flaw?
By spending so much time on the setup, the logline becomes unbalanced, and it feels like the protagonist is going to Marilyn; until you assign the action and goal to the logline.
The event always needs to be something that happens TO your protagonist. It can’t be something that he does to set the story in motion – so him botching the mission can’t be it. What CAUSES him to botch the mission?
Perhaps:
When their cover is blown on a mission to (what was the end goal of seducing Tito?), a nebbish diplomat must smuggle Marilyn Monroe, the US’ biggest movie star and newest spy, out of Yugoslavia before their blunder leads to all out war.
I can see Woody Allen and Scarlett Johannsen in the lead roles ….
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