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A young rookie cop responds to noise complaint that turns sour when the offender turns out to be a mentally disturbed drug addict that forces him to take a drug that allows him to see demons.
You're welcome, glad I could help! The "stop being able to see demons" goal sounds to me like a "refusual of the call" reaction, I'd say the main action would be to fight the demons and save the world, so this would be better for your logline. Also, maybe "demon world revealing" drug might better suRead more
You’re welcome, glad I could help!
The “stop being able to see demons” goal sounds to me like a “refusual of the call” reaction, I’d say the main action would be to fight the demons and save the world, so this would be better for your logline.
Also, maybe “demon world revealing” drug might better suggest that the demons were always there?
So something like:
When a deranged addict forces a rookie cop to take a “demon revealing” drug, he must destroy the demons to save the world. 🙂
See lessDirty Filthy Supermodel. When an untidy grumpy dustbin man is knocked down by a truck, he meets a fashion conscience God at the perly gates. He's given one month to get his face on a fashion magazine to gain entry to heaven or face expulsion to hell.
The complete opposite of the well worn "looks don't matter it's what's inside that counts" story, the "looks DO matter, as commanded by God!" story :) Although this type of movie usually isn't my thing, this one intrigues me because the main character is basically forced to learn the wrong lesson. HRead more
The complete opposite of the well worn “looks don’t matter it’s what’s inside that counts” story, the “looks DO matter, as commanded by God!” story 🙂
Although this type of movie usually isn’t my thing, this one intrigues me because the main character is basically forced to learn the wrong lesson.
How does it play out? Does he ultimately reject God, and favor Hell, finding it preferable to heaven? Or is God testing him?
The logline is very well crafted, containing the essential elements, MC, goal, obstacles, stakes, and inner journey (towards superficiality). My only suggestion would be to cut it down, and make it between 25-30 words.
Here’s my crack at it:
When a grumpy garbage man is hit by a truck, a fashion conscious God gives him one month to get his face on a fashion magazine to avoid hell.
See less\"A withdrawn, abused and bullied teenager, does well to keep his various and at times genius talents well hidden from his tormentors. A chance meeting with a drifter however, changes everything.\"
Great, thats better! Now I recommend cutting it down to the bare essentials... can you say it in 25-30 words? Also it seems there are two goals in the story: The first is the goal of the adventure he has with the drifter. What is this goal? Do they accomplish it? The second is the revenge goal. OnceRead more
Great, thats better! Now I recommend cutting it down to the bare essentials… can you say it in 25-30 words?
Also it seems there are two goals in the story:
The first is the goal of the adventure he has with the drifter. What is this goal? Do they accomplish it?
The second is the revenge goal.
Once you work out the first goal, I’d pick the stronger one of the two and mention just one in the logline.
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