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When a colonisation crew of four escaping a threatened earth, awakens by ship failure, a useless artist must save the mission and mankind from a captain, incorrectly believing one of them isn?t human.
Thanks for your feedback. I thought that the 10 first pages should explain how the thinking machine gets created, and how it enlighten the humans - giving sight to the blind and ears to the deaf, but at the cost of its persistence. Its simply unstoppable. A secret project to preserve the human raceRead more
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See lessI thought that the 10 first pages should explain how the thinking machine gets created, and how it enlighten the humans – giving sight to the blind and ears to the deaf, but at the cost of its persistence. Its simply unstoppable. A secret project to preserve the human race is created with a mission to settle on a new planet etc…
Thats the setup.
But I guess one can leave out the setup from the logline? I tried to have some of it there (with “threatened earth”). Infested earth is probably better but then I want to make clear its not a virus or a plague but rather an uncontrollable evolution (like the industrial revolution).
When a colonisation crew of four escaping a threatened earth, awakens by ship failure, a useless artist must save the mission and mankind from a captain, incorrectly believing one of them isn?t human.
And since the logline is a tool to find the real story I will consider making it simpler. As you say the ship-failure is not really important, but its just an excuse to get them together in the middle of nowhere.
And since the logline is a tool to find the real story I will consider making it simpler. As you say the ship-failure is not really important, but its just an excuse to get them together in the middle of nowhere.
See lessWhen a colonisation crew of four escaping a threatened earth, awakens by ship failure, a useless artist must save the mission and mankind from a captain, incorrectly believing one of them isn?t human.
Thanks for the input! Sometimes when you write an outline of a plot its hard to see what's important and what's not. The reason for this ship is actually to save the human race from hybridisation by the machines. Therefore an excerpt of different people have been chosen to represent humanity. The smRead more
Thanks for the input! Sometimes when you write an outline of a plot its hard to see what’s important and what’s not.
The reason for this ship is actually to save the human race from hybridisation by the machines. Therefore an excerpt of different people have been chosen to represent humanity. The small crew contains of a captain, a doctor, an engineer and an artist. No one likes the artist, since he can’t really do anything smart like the others, but the artist is the protagonist.
When man has discovered artificial intelligence it can’t be stopped. What first looks like something great (a thinking machine) turns out to be devastating to humanity as is. The thinking machine is spreading like a virus into every single computer chip ever created because it doesn?t want to get turned off (this is a story by it self). With nano technology it then spreads into the human brain and the hybrids are created. The hybrids are like humans, but much smarter (wifi connected etc). This becomes a new race (humans 2.0).
Okay, so this ship is escaping this to ensure the preservation of the human. Thus, we don’t want any hybrids on-board.
See lessThis story would start about here with the ship failure. However it turns out (in the end) that the ship was in fact awakened by a message from earth warning them about a hybrid on board. The captain deleted the message to ensure the real hybrid would not know, but of course the real hybrid is not whom we think it is (We suspect the captain who suspects the doctor). The real hybrid is (probably too obvious) the artist. He will kill the captain to save the doctor (a human). He will also show that the hybrid is a worthy representation of humanity since it is simply a human with more abilities (this is what my story is really about).