1. Posted: March 23, 2019In:

    After pledging his eyes posthumous, a highschool nerd must evade fatal attacks from a blind cameraman (on a hunt for matching doner)

    Richiev Singularity

    Interesting premise. Where does the story take place? This seems like it would be a 'monster in the house' type story, if that is the case, if the lead is trapped in a specific space such as the school or at the mall after hours,? it would be good to tell us where the story takes place.

    Interesting premise.

    Where does the story take place? This seems like it would be a ‘monster in the house’ type story, if that is the case, if the lead is trapped in a specific space such as the school or at the mall after hours,? it would be good to tell us where the story takes place.

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  2. Posted: March 16, 2019In:

    Comedic Drama Tv series: When a Nigerian foreign exchange student moves in with a white suburban, American family, cultural differences and close minded town ideals turns the once home, into a house of unrelated individuals

    Richiev Singularity

    In a story, the lead character has a goal. There is also someone or something standing in the way of that goal. You should add the lead character's goal to this logline.

    In a story, the lead character has a goal.
    There is also someone or something standing in the way of that goal.

    You should add the lead character’s goal to this logline.

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  3. Posted: February 27, 2019In:

    When a broken hearted assault victim finds self-defence classes, a hidden talent for martial arts is unlocked. Her powers are challenged by an enemy Kung Fu clan who seek to destroy her and the school. (Revised edition).

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    "When her martial arts school is attacked, a former assault victim with a knack for self-defense must..." (Then tell us what she must do)

    “When her martial arts school is attacked, a former assault victim with a knack for self-defense must…” (Then tell us what she must do)

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