1. Posted: April 8, 2018In:

    Edited: When an seasoned womanizer transforms his female best friend from a clinger to a player and finds himself attracted to his new creation, but realizes the repercussions of his teachings is worst than he imagined.

    Richiev Singularity

    When he turns his nerdy gal pal into a player, a heartless womanizer must find a way to transform her back into the woman he loves - the woman he is about to lose."

    When he turns his nerdy gal pal into a player, a heartless womanizer must find a way to transform her back into the woman he loves – the woman he is about to lose.”

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  2. Posted: April 9, 2018In:

    Does my logline work, is it clear and show the character, event, and action.

    Richiev Singularity

    You seem to spend a lot of time on the backstory because the forward story seems to be about facing prejudice in America. In other words, you don't really need to tell us in the logline how she got to America;-------------------------------------------------------------------- "When she moves?in witRead more

    You seem to spend a lot of time on the backstory because the forward story seems to be about facing prejudice in America. In other words, you don’t really need to tell us in the logline how she got to America;
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    “When she moves?in with her stepfather in Compton California, a? spirited Caribbean?runaway must use her homespun common sense and smarts to overcome the prejudices and stereotypes she receives from an unwelcoming neighborhood.”

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  3. Posted: April 7, 2018In:

    After her big crush reveals himself as a werewolf, a vampire girl must find a way around her orthodox family to get together

    Richiev Singularity

    I like the concept. This could be a fantasy version of "Look who's coming to dinner" (You should study Jewish?law and customs and then utilize them into you created vampire culture)

    I like the concept.

    This could be a fantasy version of “Look who’s coming to dinner”

    (You should study Jewish?law and customs and then utilize them into you created vampire culture)

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