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When a military-trained biologist’s husband unexpectedly returns alive from a secret mission, she must go on a quest to a mysterious lighthouse to save his life – and the world.
How about this, hopefully, this concise version says the same thing: ----------------------------------------------------- "When her?husband returns from a secret military mission, a biologist must travel to a mysterious lighthouse to save him -- and the world." I am changing a few things with take?Read more
How about this, hopefully, this concise version says the same thing:
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“When her?husband returns from a secret military mission, a biologist must travel to a mysterious lighthouse to save him — and the world.”
I am changing a few things with take?number 2
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“When she discovers her special forces husband has been taken captive, a resolute biologist must travel to a mysterious lighthouse to save him — and the world”
Revised: When a bumbling alien pollutes the timeline, he and his adopted human family must travel back in history, and prevent the apocalypse? again!
After reading your logline, it is difficult for me to tell when the backstory ends and when the actual story begins.I am also unclear what must actually be done because,?"interfere in key historical events" is vague. You should pick a specific event.Here would be an example of picking a specific eveRead more
After reading your logline, it is difficult for me to tell when the backstory ends and when the actual story begins.
See lessI am also unclear what must actually be done because,?”interfere in key historical events” is vague. You should pick a specific event.
Here would be an example of picking a specific event that must be changed in order to stave the apocalypse.
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“When a well-meaning?but bumbling alien interferes in our timeline, causing the end of human civilization, he must?go back in time and prevent a brash reality star from becoming President to save mankind.”
Revised: After her children are taken, on account of her mental illness, a holier-than-though mother must reclaim them, by undergoing a life-threatening VR therapy: defeating embodiments of her demons in simulated combat.
"When she loses custody of her children, a desperate mother joins an experimental?virtual reality treatment for her mental condition, in the hopes of a cure and getting her kids back."
“When she loses custody of her children, a desperate mother joins an experimental?virtual reality treatment for her mental condition, in the hopes of a cure and getting her kids back.”
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