1. Posted: April 26, 2017In:

    A soldier returns home with a Bronze Star, a Purple Heart, and a desire to become a professional high stakes poker player, believing it is a safer lifestyle. So she thought.

    Richiev Singularity

    This is a set-up not a story. The story would be what happens when he becomes a poker player.

    This is a set-up not a story. The story would be what happens when he becomes a poker player.

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  2. Posted: April 26, 2017In:

    What about

    Richiev Singularity

    This is a great idea, because it could be done for no budget and uploaded to the internet. However the logline is not compelling. I'll give it a try but the logline may still be missing that one extra thing. ------------------------------ "When a Telemarketer's last call turns out to be a suicidal fRead more

    This is a great idea, because it could be done for no budget and uploaded to the internet.

    However the logline is not compelling.
    I’ll give it a try but the logline may still be missing that one extra thing.
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    “When a Telemarketer’s last call turns out to be a suicidal farmer, realizing she may be his last hope, she stays with him on the line to talk him out of killing himself.”

     

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  3. Posted: April 23, 2017In:

    An ordinary biker girl sacrifices her extraordinary corporate career to win her love ; embarks on a solo Motorcycle quest of her inspirational soulmate.

    Richiev Singularity

    Story is conflict, I am not seeing any conflict (I am not saying your story has no conflict, I am just saying I don't see it expressed in the logline)

    Story is conflict, I am not seeing any conflict (I am not saying your story has no conflict, I am just saying I don’t see it expressed in the logline)

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