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An incisive detective imprisons a man who is murdered in prison while innocent, so he resigns out of remorse to free unjustly incarcerated people in defiance of the system he once defended.
Unless this is for a TV show, I would try personalizing the logline. For instance, instead of working to free unjustly incarcerated people, the story should be about a specific incarcerated person, and the stakes should be high. "A detective…
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When the black sleek sports car of a tall dark handsome accountant creates a sensation, he begins to find ways of taking the girl next door on a first date.
This logline is confusing. On first read, my first thought was, how can a sports car take out the girl next door on a date? Is the car like Knight Rider? However, after reading it a couple of times I…
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The richest man in the solar system wants to colonize the stars with his newly invented faster-than-light technology, but every power mad government and greedy corporation will stop at nothing to take it for themselves.
I would take out the word 'struggles.' You might also make this into a David vs Goliath story as well. An Example: ----- "After developing a faster-than-light spaceship, a (broke genius) races against time to find a colonizable world before…
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“A caregivers journal, with accounts of her experience, gets in the hand of a young person revealing many hidden secrets.”
The second attempt at the logline is better. It is written from the perspective of the lead character/couple. You might want to add stakes to your logline, but only if it can be said in a word or two. ---…
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An unemployed man realizes that the reason for divorces is not the relationship between husband and wife but between mother -in – law and daughter – in – law. Sensing this insight as a business model he starts counselling sessions for mother in law and daughter in law and it works for him. He becomes rich and finds love to marry. Everything looks great until he finds the same mother in law and daughter in law issues in his own marriage which he struggles to resolve .
Possible title: Heal Thyself (That comes from the saying, 'Physician Heal Thyself')
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An adopted cat from the farm befriends an abused duck from a neighboring factory farm, risking disappointing her new owners as she desperately tries to prevent the sad fate of her feathered friend.
I can picture this story in my head from the logline.
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Daniel, a young business student, is diagnosed with fatal familial insomnia, an illness that will deny him sleep and will kill him shortly. After that, Daniel breaks with his previous life and begins to try to fulfill his dream of writing and publishing a novel, having to fight against his parents’ reproaches, his creative blocks, a seemingly impossible love that is now blossoming, and his growing dementia. .
"After being diagnosed with chronic insomnia, a young writer quits his day job determined to write the great American novel before his Insomnia and growing dementia destroy his dreams."
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When a nerdy guy, who no one would like to date, is pranked , he creates using AI and robotics the hottest girl ever existed in the universe and programs it to date him , surprising and shocking everyone.
"After being humiliated by the most popular girl in school, a nerdy programmer creates a hot robot girlfriend to prove to his classmates he's got some rizz." ------ Not sure if rizz is the correct word, perhaps the word 'game'…
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The night before her on call shift, Sarah, a nurse working a second job, finds herself in the midst of late night deliveries. As she tries to walk her way back home, after the last delivery of the night, her night leads her all the way to work.
Let me put it this way. A pro-tagonist is pro-active. In your logline and mini-synopsis, things happen to the lead character. What must the lead character do? How do these events cause the protagonist to have a goal? What is…
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The night before her on call shift, Sarah, a nurse working a second job, finds herself in the midst of late night deliveries. As she tries to walk her way back home, after the last delivery of the night, her night leads her all the way to work.
You are describing scenes, not the plot. What is the lead character's goal? What is standing in her way?
