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After reuniting with and marrying his childhood friend, an aspiring writer tries to build a normal life in the wake of getting dragged into the murder of an arsonist that killed his wife's father when they were kids, only to find that there is no "normal."
This logline seems to imply you have two inciting incidents 1) reuniting and marrying his childhood friend 2) getting dragged into the murder of an arsonist This may be a logline problem or it could be a story problem. Either way, if you stick with one inciting incident in the logline, it'll help clRead more
This logline seems to imply you have two inciting incidents
1) reuniting and marrying his childhood friend
2) getting dragged into the murder of an arsonist
This may be a logline problem or it could be a story problem. Either way, if you stick with one inciting incident in the logline, it’ll help clean it up and make the logline less jumbled.
Hope that helped, good luck with this.
See lessTo get the girl of his dreams a timid momma?s boy must team up with the local cat burglar, but her unorthodox methods put more than his love life at risk.
What's missing is 'how' teaming with the cat burglar will win the girl: "In order to win the girl of his dreams a timid momma's boy must team with a local cat burglar to steal back his true loves family heirloom that was taken from her by a greedy banker." Hope that helped, good luck with this!
What’s missing is ‘how’ teaming with the cat burglar will win the girl:
“In order to win the girl of his dreams a timid momma’s boy must team with a local cat burglar to steal back his true loves family heirloom that was taken from her by a greedy banker.”
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
See lessWhole human beeing fight for the lost planet earth against the majestically, though, imperfect fallen angel.
Good advice Karel, I wan't quite sure how to approach this one but you summed it up quite well.
Good advice Karel, I wan’t quite sure how to approach this one but you summed it up quite well.
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