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Some old-styled black magician migrants are suspected for the mysterious death of a boy, and their houses burnt down; but soon these good people turn back to life as the undead due to their powers and are hungry for revenge from the entire town.
I believe there is a good idea here but this logline is worded in an awkward way and should be re-written for clarity. "Old-styled black magician migants" This line is confusing. "...soon these good people turn back to life as the undead due to their powers." This line is overly long and clunky, JusRead more
I believe there is a good idea here but this logline is worded in an awkward way and should be re-written for clarity.
“Old-styled black magician migants” This line is confusing.
“…soon these good people turn back to life as the undead due to their powers.” This line is overly long and clunky, Just say “they come back as zombies.”
“…Are hungry for revenge from the entire town” The revenge is coming from the town?
Anyway, with a little bit of re-writing this should be much better,
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When three migrants are killed after mysterious death of the mayors son, they return as zombies seeking revenge on the backwoods town that wrongly murdered them.”
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Hope that helped, good luck with this.
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