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Can a simple minded accountant, even outwit a butterfly, let alone learn something, when he attends a day long workshop on pet zombie care, given by a snide mysterious intellectual snob.
Here is a logline attempt that gives a distinct goal and stakes to the lead character. I changed some things around in this logline, so your logline will probably end up different than this one. -------------------------------------------------------------- "When a salt of the earth farmer uses a zoRead more
Here is a logline attempt that gives a distinct goal and stakes to the lead character. I changed some things around in this logline, so your logline will probably end up different than this one.
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“When a salt of the earth farmer uses a zombie slur, the state forces him to pass a zombie sensitivity course, taught by a snooty intellectual, and if he fails, he will lose his farm.”
Can a simple minded accountant, even outwit a butterfly, let alone learn something, when he attends a day long workshop on pet zombie care, given by a snide mysterious intellectual snob.
If the lead character is smart enough to be an accountant I am sure he is capable of doing a one day workshop on zombie wrangling. 1: Your character should have a dream or goal which makes this class important to him. Maybe he has always dreamed of being a zombie wrangler. 2: Your story should haveRead more
If the lead character is smart enough to be an accountant
I am sure he is capable of doing a one day workshop on zombie wrangling.
1: Your character should have a dream or goal which makes this class important to him. Maybe he has always dreamed of being a zombie wrangler.
2: Your story should have recognizable stakes. If he fails what he will lose? Will he… a. get fired, b. fail to reach his dream, c. Be eaten by zombies? What are the stakes?
3: I would avoid writing loglines in the form of a question.
This idea is different, a series of pieces I have not seen put together in this particular way before. Forrest Gump meets the Walking Dead.
So the story is original but I think you might give the logline another try.
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This is an interesting situation. But in a story (And Logline) There is a lead character who has a goal. The inciting incident is pretty clear. The arrival of the ancient enemy. And I assume the goal would be something along the lines of defeating the enemy. (The lead character must -do this thing-Read more
This is an interesting situation.
But in a story (And Logline) There is a lead character who has a goal.
The inciting incident is pretty clear. The arrival of the ancient enemy.
And I assume the goal would be something along the lines of defeating the enemy. (The lead character must -do this thing- if the enemy is to be defeated)
As a result, the best way to improve the logline would be to add a lead character. Perhaps one of the immortal aliens, perhaps a human. Maybe they have to team up to convince humanity of the danger?
So anyway, I like the idea. But it needs a lead.
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