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An alien creator of the human genome leads a militia to stop his brother from razing the only surviving master copies of his work on Earth once and for all.
This logline is a bit clunky. The first seven words are confusing and I think you could take out the part about the militia. What about something like: The alien who created the human genome must stop his evil brother from destroying his work and all humanity in the process.
This logline is a bit clunky. The first seven words are confusing and I think you could take out the part about the militia.
What about something like:
The alien who created the human genome must stop his evil brother from destroying his work and all humanity in the process.
See lessA haughty Elvin princess with no love for humans, must leave her beloved sheltering woods, to find her brother before their father passes.
dpalliser, I think you are right about using an adjective before brother. "Missing brother" would be the closest.
dpalliser, I think you are right about using an adjective before brother. “Missing brother” would be the closest.
See lessA haughty Elvin princess with no love for humans, must leave her beloved sheltering woods, to find her brother before their father passes.
Thanks Kriss, In this world, when elves reach what we would consider early twenties, (but for them it is more like early one hundreds) they go on what is called "The Walk" where they leave the woods and explore the outside world. The brother has been gone for about twenty-five years, longer than mosRead more
Thanks Kriss,
In this world, when elves reach what we would consider early twenties, (but for them it is more like early one hundreds) they go on what is called “The Walk” where they leave the woods and explore the outside world. The brother has been gone for about twenty-five years, longer than most who go on The Walk, but not so long anyone is worried.
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