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After facing corruption in the porn industry, a film director and an aging actress teams up and kills those who is about to release their sex tape.
This should fix some of the problems both 'dpg' and 'Mike Pedley' had with your story. (The problem that no one would care about a sex tape in the porn industry. So, find a setting or industry where they would care if a sex tape was released) -------------------------------------- "When a famous evaRead more
This should fix some of the problems both ‘dpg’ and ‘Mike Pedley’ had with your story.
(The problem that no one would care about a sex tape in the porn industry. So, find a setting or industry where they would care if a sex tape was released)
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“When a famous evangelist discovers a video of him and one of his parishioners is about to be released, he and his ruthless wife will stop at nothing to stop the sex tape from being released and his career destroyed.”
Possible Title: “The preacher in sheep’s clothing.”
See lessRight before Christmas, a successful young Hollywood agent is fired from his job. Shame filled and arrogant, he is forced to spend the holiday with his family in New York City where he meets Melissa, a kind and beautiful young woman who unexpectedly pulls him out of his funk, helps him move on from his old job, and becomes the greatest Christmas miracle of the season.
One thing that I noticed is you put the end of the story in the logline. You should leave a little mystery as to the story's ending. You should tell the reader who the lead character is (Which you did) What sets the story into motion ( Being fired) and finally should should give us the lead characteRead more
One thing that I noticed is you put the end of the story in the logline. You should leave a little mystery as to the story’s ending.
You should tell the reader who the lead character is (Which you did)
What sets the story into motion ( Being fired)
and finally should should give us the lead characters’ dramatic goal.
What does the lead want? What are the stakes if they don’t succeed?
However, I wouldn’t tell the reader how it ends, or whether the lead character succeeds or fails in their goal. So I would leave that part out of the logline
Hopefully, this was a helpful tip.
See lessWhen her boyfriend’s doctors are unable to treat his fatal illness, an unsophisticated Papuan girl must convince him to travel to Papua to allow her Medicine man grandfather to save the love of her life.
Honestly, I think this is the best version of this logline that you have attempted, and I 'get' the story from this logline. You have been pretty close the last few attempts and I think this one is the closest to what gets the story across!
Honestly, I think this is the best version of this logline that you have attempted, and I ‘get’ the story from this logline. You have been pretty close the last few attempts and I think this one is the closest to what gets the story across!
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