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When the wife of a busy young lawyer threatens the lives of their children he is forced to assume sole custody and raise them in the shadow of interference from his former friends.
You should give us a more specific inciting incident. 'Threatens' could mean a lot of things. What specifically did she do?Did she lock the car doors and drive the children into a lake?Did she fall asleep while smoking and set fire to the house?Did she force them to watch "The Last Jedi" over and ovRead more
You should give us a more specific inciting incident. ‘Threatens’ could mean a lot of things. What specifically did she do?
Did she lock the car doors and drive the children into a lake?
Did she fall asleep while smoking and set fire to the house?
Did she force them to watch “The Last Jedi” over and over?
If you are going to use ‘threatens the lives of their children’ as the inciting incident, then give us the specific event in which she threatened (Endangered) the children’s lives.
See less4 When a man leaves his cruiser with his best friend who then flees in it, he must convince the Water Police that there is no crime but they should save his friend in the sinking cruiser.
Your lead character's goal is to convince someone else to take action: The Water Police ( Are you talking, The Coast Guard? or Bay Watch?) Instead, the lead character should be the one trying to rescue his friend or the lead character should be the guy on the boat
Your lead character’s goal is to convince someone else to take action: The Water Police ( Are you talking, The Coast Guard? or Bay Watch?)
Instead, the lead character should be the one trying to rescue his friend or the lead character should be the guy on the boat
See lessDisillusioned with Hollywood, a movie star returns to her Midwest hometown to attend her high school reunion – only to reignite old flames, rivalries and loves.
This needs a hook.There have been quite a few stories about someone going back to their small town (and even about the reunion) So you need that "One Thing" that separates this from those.Anyway, this is a cool idea as long as you get a hook going... maybe something to do with "Me Too" that would beRead more
This needs a hook.
There have been quite a few stories about someone going back to their small town (and even about the reunion) So you need that “One Thing” that separates this from those.
Anyway, this is a cool idea as long as you get a hook going… maybe something to do with “Me Too” that would be topical. (Edit* when I said ‘me too’ I am talking about how she is an actress and what might have caused her to become Disillusioned with Hollywood, her motivation)
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