1. Posted: February 20, 2019In:

    When a deceitful cult leader?s doomsday prophecy comes true, his followers refuse to believe he?s not a prophet, despite his panicked confession, forcing him to take responsibility and find refuge for them all before the asteroid strikes.

    Richiev Singularity

    If they prophesy comes true, why would they doubt him

    If they prophesy comes true, why would they doubt him

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  2. Posted: February 18, 2019In:

    While celebrating at an exclusive costume ball, a group of superrich Singaporeans is lured away by sexy aliens and now must save Earth from being taken over by superrich aliens looking to add Earth to their coffers.

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    Richiev Singularity

    I guess my question is, how does the first part of your logline relate to the second? How do we get from, being lured away by sexy aliens to saving the world from superrich aliens? What is the connection between the two sets of aliens?

    I guess my question is, how does the first part of your logline relate to the second?

    How do we get from, being lured away by sexy aliens to saving the world from superrich aliens? What is the connection between the two sets of aliens?

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  3. Posted: February 16, 2019In:

    After dropping his wedding band in a wishing well, a dissatisfied middle-aged husband discovers he can experience life if he hadn?t got married simply by removing his wedding ring, but must choose which life to lead when his ring?s power begins to fade.

    Richiev Singularity

    You have a strong hook but not a strong inciting incident. You need a specific scene at the beginning of the story that establishes the problems in his marriage. Then introduce the hook about the Wishing well. So nice hook, but you need to establish the problem in a more compelling way.

    You have a strong hook but not a strong inciting incident.
    You need a specific scene at the beginning of the story that establishes the problems in his marriage.
    Then introduce the hook about the Wishing well.

    So nice hook, but you need to establish the problem in a more compelling way.

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