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When financial instability forces him to teach English to immigrants, a heartbroken, over-imaginative New Yorker must help a ragtag bunch of foreigners pass the class or risk losing what little he has left.
This logline attempt is better than the last one. My one critique would be, "financial instability" is a situation. But in a movie, you need a solid incident that shows financial instability. An example would be: The problem: The lead character's landlord tells him he has 30 to pay his back rent orRead more
This logline attempt is better than the last one.
My one critique would be, “financial instability” is a situation.
But in a movie, you need a solid incident that shows financial instability.
An example would be:
See lessThe problem: The lead character’s landlord tells him he has 30 to pay his back rent or he will be kicked out of his apartment.
The Answer: Then he gets this offer. If he can teach the immigrants to speak English?he will receive enough money to pay the back rent.
The Catch: Everyone must pass the exam if the lead character is to get the ‘big bonus’ so if even one student fails the lead will lose his home.
The conflict: Almost all the immigrants don’t speak English… at all.
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The B story: One of the few immigrants who does speak a little English is the love interest.? He must work with her if he is to teach the immigrants to speak English.
The B Conflict: He has a fiance who does not like immigrants.
After 13 months of no contact from the Alien ship that appeared in Earth’s Orbit, five New York State citizens find their lives inexplicably intertwined as they and the rest of the world adjust to a new reality.
13 months of nothing does not sound very compelling.
13 months of nothing does not sound very compelling.
See lessA god-fearing headmistress explores ungodly means to help an underage student cut off from his toxic parents.
I read your previous logline and this one. As a result, I would say, how the logline should be written depends on what the audience knows and when they know it... Does the audience know the headmistress helps the kid fake his death? Or is it a big reveal? If the audience knows from the start the heaRead more
I read your previous logline and this one. As a result, I would say, how the logline should be written depends on what the audience knows and when they know it…
Does the audience know the headmistress helps the kid fake his death? Or is it a big reveal?
If the audience knows from the start the headmistress?is helping the kid fake his death then this is good.
See lessIf the audience is in the dark about the headmistresses plan, then you are back at square one because a logline never gives away the big reveal.