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After his best friend dies committing a school shooting, a troubled teen is sent to live with his estranged father and meets a boy who opens him up to new experiences.
The story seems to be about the relationship between the troubled teen and his new friend. The rest is backstory, which is good for the script but just takes up space in the logline.What is the lead character's goal? He meets the new friend and then he wants... (What does your lead character want?)
The story seems to be about the relationship between the troubled teen and his new friend. The rest is backstory, which is good for the script but just takes up space in the logline.
What is the lead character’s goal? He meets the new friend and then he wants… (What does your lead character want?)
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1: The mother needs a definable goal.2: Mass shootings?are usually stopped by the police, In other words, the shooter stops killing when the police arrive and kill or apprehend the killer. This makes the police the good guys.But in your story, the police seem to be the bad guys.Therefore, if you wanRead more
1: The mother needs a definable goal.
2: Mass shootings?are usually stopped by the police, In other words, the shooter stops killing when the police arrive and kill or apprehend the killer. This makes the police the good guys.
But in your story, the police seem to be the bad guys.
Therefore, if you want the police to be the main antagonists, you should have the husband shot by the police, not shot in a mass shooting. This is to avoid dividing the focus.
As for the story, Yes I think, if you give the lead character a definable goal and keep the focus tight, it could make a very topical mini-series.
Here would be an example:
“When her husband is killed by the police, who mistake him for an active shooter; an inner-city mother seeks justice in a city where opposing the police has deadly consequences.”
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See lessPerhaps the husband tries to stop a mass shooting and wrestles the gun away from the shooter, the police bust in, see him with the gun and shoot him. That way you could keep the mass shooting angle but the husband would still be wrongly shot by the police.
When a problematic medical student, on probation, discovers a plot to kill the imperial family and overthrow the current galactic dynasty, he offers his services to the mastermind terrorist and falls in love with his daughter while trying to undermine his plan.
"When he discovers a plot to kill the imperial family, a disgraced medical student who was banished to the outer rim must..." (then tell us what he must do)
“When he discovers a plot to kill the imperial family, a disgraced medical student who was banished to the outer rim must…” (then tell us what he must do)
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