1. Posted: January 29, 2019In:

    In 1970’s New York City, a self conscious awkward pre-teen girl desperately struggles to survive the chaos of her Mother’s drug addicted bipolar mania and fundamentalist religious cult.

    Richiev Singularity

    Does your lead character have a goal?

    Does your lead character have a goal?

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  2. Posted: January 28, 2019In:

    SHORT: When a bank robbery goes wrong, a naive and desperate young man has 3 hours to retrieve the stolen money in order to save his grandmother?s life, while being chased by the entire police force of his small town.

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    If he stole the money, why does he have to retrieve the money? I think an important story element is missing from the logline and it's leaving us a little confused.

    If he stole the money, why does he have to retrieve the money? I think an important story element is missing from the logline and it’s leaving us a little confused.

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  3. Posted: January 25, 2019In:

    During the 1950?s in segregated Louisiana, a working-class African American mother and wife struggles with unforeseen births, deaths and racial issues while pursuing an unconventional career.

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    As a rule, the word 'struggles' is bad for a logline. The word 'must' should replace it. When her daughter unexpectedly gets pregnant, an African?American?in 1950's America must... (Then tell us what she must do)

    As a rule, the word ‘struggles’ is bad for a logline. The word ‘must’ should replace it.

    When her daughter unexpectedly gets pregnant, an African?American?in 1950’s America must… (Then tell us what she must do)

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