1. Posted: February 27, 2018In:

    In order to open a fingerprint secure safe and steal money for his chemotherapy, a shy delivery boy who can not see a blood has to cut and steal five thumbs from five different mafia bosses in one night.

    Richiev Singularity

    Here are two logline attempts, hope they help --------------------------------------"Diagnosed with cancer, a shy Brooklyn delivery boy has one night to acquire thumbs from 5 mafia bosses in order to open a safe with the money to pay for his Chemotherapy.""When his daughter is diagnosed with cancer,Read more

    Here are two logline attempts, hope they help
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    “Diagnosed with cancer, a shy Brooklyn delivery boy has one night to acquire thumbs from 5 mafia bosses in order to open a safe with the money to pay for his Chemotherapy.”

    “When his daughter is diagnosed with cancer,? a desperate?FedEx?delivery man has one night to acquire the thumbs of two seedy big pharma execs that will open a safe with the money to pay for his daughter’s?Chemotherapy.”
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    by the way, I give this story ‘two thumbs up’

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  2. Posted: February 27, 2018In:

    After the crew of a huge freight ship sailing from Tunesia to New York opens a container, they discover a group of terrorists.

    Richiev Singularity

    You need a lead character Who (When this even you described happens) takes action and has a specific goal

    You need a lead character
    Who (When this even you described happens) takes action and has a specific goal

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  3. Posted: February 23, 2018In:

    An outcast elephant who prefers to keep to himself becomes an unlikely hero when he unintentionally prevents a tragedy from occurring, but now he must learn how to become a leader.

    Richiev Singularity

    I like the idea, but you need a specific villain, maybe a crocodile.

    I like the idea, but you need a specific villain, maybe a crocodile.

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