1. Posted: January 8, 2018In:

    An intellectual farmer, escaping his rigid community whilst protecting his collapsing heritage, consorts with charismatic mystics whose growing fanaticism threatens his romantic relationship and farm, forcing him to oppose them and confront his alienation.

    Richiev Singularity

    This logline would be greatly improved if you put a face to his alienation. A specific person in the community who is the instigator of his ostracism.

    This logline would be greatly improved if you put a face to his alienation.

    A specific person in the community who is the instigator of his ostracism.

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  2. Posted: January 8, 2018In:

    a broke man falls back to his “college dream band” only to realize his record producer is the mafia he is running from

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    Richiev Singularity

    I am not sure a man on the run from the mafia would start an endeavor?that puts him on a stage and in front of crowds of people. Most people on the run from the mob keep a low profile. However, up until the part about the mob, I was actually enjoying the idea.

    I am not sure a man on the run from the mafia would start an endeavor?that puts him on a stage and in front of crowds of people. Most people on the run from the mob keep a low profile.

    However, up until the part about the mob, I was actually enjoying the idea.

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  3. Posted: January 7, 2018In:

    When a grieving widow learns her husband took a bullet intended for her, she must survive long enough to discover who wants her dead.

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    Richiev Singularity

    I believe I understand the setup now: The lead character and her husband are mugged, during the event, the husband is killed (Stepping in front of a bullet) and after the mugging, the lead character discovers the mugger was actually an assassin but she doesn't know who or why someone would want herRead more

    I believe I understand the setup now:

    The lead character and her husband are mugged, during the event, the husband is killed (Stepping in front of a bullet) and after the mugging, the lead character discovers the mugger was actually an assassin but she doesn’t know who or why someone would want her dead.

    In that case, (If I now understand the setup correct) I believe the motivation of the lead character should be that of revenge. If the man she loves is killed, just surviving isn’t a strong enough goal or action. She should be motivated to discover who killed her husband so she can either take them out or seek legal justice.

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