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After Alexander The Great’s death, one of his generals seizes Egypt, fights to restore it into a mighty empire, and eventually becomes Pharoah, founding a dynasty of kings, queens, and gods.
Good luck with this. Never thought about the historical similarities in that manner, definitely a unique take.
Good luck with this. Never thought about the historical similarities in that manner, definitely a unique take.
See lessChosen by destiny, five teenage runaways entered to a parallel world. Empowered by mystical swords,they vow to protect the kingdom from the army of the underworld.
When writing a logline, it is good to figure out what sets the story in motion. What is the big event that changes the lead character(s) life? Let me try a logline from the perspective that traveling to a parallel world is that big event. "When they are transported to a magical realm under attack byRead more
When writing a logline, it is good to figure out what sets the story in motion. What is the big event that changes the lead character(s) life?
Let me try a logline from the perspective that traveling to a parallel world is that big event.
“When they are transported to a magical realm under attack by an underworld army, five runaways head to the call to protect the land with the help of a snarky magical sword.”
Obviously, I added the term ‘snarky’ to give the logline a little flavor.
Also, this logline could benefit from having a lead character.
Hope this helped.
See lessWhen a mysterious stranger hires an adept journalist in a mind investigation firm, he discovers the shocking truth – his life is but a dream world wrought by his new boss, Satan, and forced to choose between his lover and career.
This logline is confusing. 1: The logline does not tell us who the "He" is. You have a mysterious stranger and an adept journalist, then you say, he, but do not say which 'he' you mean. In order to clarify this you should try writing it more along the lines of: "When he's hired by a mysterious stranRead more
This logline is confusing.
1: The logline does not tell us who the “He” is. You have a mysterious stranger and an adept journalist, then you say, he, but do not say which ‘he’ you mean.
In order to clarify this you should try writing it more along the lines of:
“When he’s hired by a mysterious stranger, an adept journalist working for a mind investigation firm discovers…”
2: The logline does not address the central problem.
a: Problem: He is living in a dream world
b: Solution: Must choose between career and lover?
So the solution of choosing between career and lover doesn’t solve the problem of living in a dream world.
Anyway, hope this helped, the first problem is easily fixed with a little shuffling of words, the second problem is more difficult since I don’t know the full story, I am not sure what the solution is.
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