1. Posted: July 11, 2017In:

    When a girl falls in love with an alien, she must fight to stop the government and developers from destroying the lake that keeps him alive. This is a mixed genre – Thriller/Sci-Fi/Romance.

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    Richiev Singularity

    I think the government destroying the lake would be the inciting incident. "When a greedy land developer threatens to destroy the lake of her Alien lover..." Also, you describe the lead character as a 'girl' you might want to give us a couple word description of personality.

    I think the government destroying the lake would be the inciting incident.

    “When a greedy land developer threatens to destroy the lake of her Alien lover…”

    Also, you describe the lead character as a ‘girl’ you might want to give us a couple word description of personality.

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  2. Posted: July 12, 2017In:

    To repay a debt, a gravedigger is forced to use his cemetery to cover up mob hits, but when the law leans on him, he must work both sides to avoid prison… Or worse.

    Richiev Singularity

    What does the grave digger want?

    What does the grave digger want?

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  3. Posted: July 11, 2017In:

    A rapidly spreading sickness causes a suicidal teenager to put aside her intentions to save her loved ones.

    Richiev Singularity

    Your logline is a bit backwards In a story there is an incident, that causes the lead character to do something In your logline there is an incident which causes the lead character to 'not' do something I would concentrate the logline on what the lead character will do, not what they won't do.

    Your logline is a bit backwards

    In a story there is an incident, that causes the lead character to do something
    In your logline there is an incident which causes the lead character to ‘not’ do something

    I would concentrate the logline on what the lead character will do, not what they won’t do.

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