1. Posted: May 15, 2017In:

    Surviving the crash of their plane in the Bermuda Triangle, spiritually gifted twins race their evil cyborg uncle to in a quest to find sacred elemental stones to avenge their mother’s murder and save their planet.

    Richiev Singularity

    If the goal is to save the planet, then the inciting incident should be whatever is immediately threatening the planet.

    If the goal is to save the planet, then the inciting incident should be whatever is immediately threatening the planet.

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  2. Posted: May 16, 2017In:

    An aging Krav Maga instructor reluctantly teams up with his estranged bounty hunter daughter to hunt down the man who raped and killed his wife.

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    "After his wife is brutally raped an murdered, an aging martial arts instructor seeks revenge with the help of the daughter he abandoned years ago, who is now a bounty hunter."

    “After his wife is brutally raped an murdered, an aging martial arts instructor seeks revenge with the help of the daughter he abandoned years ago, who is now a bounty hunter.”

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  3. Posted: May 15, 2017In:

    After finding a talisman in England’s most haunted ruin, three young boys awaken the ancient guardian of Berkshire Castle, which is hellbent on adding skulls to its collection.

    Richiev Singularity

    The inciting incident leads to a goal (action) for the lead character (s) In your logline, the inciting incident leads to a situation not an action. However I do like that you have tried a different approach from your last logline attempt. I guess I would start with, what does the lead character wanRead more

    The inciting incident leads to a goal (action) for the lead character (s)

    In your logline, the inciting incident leads to a situation not an action.

    However I do like that you have tried a different approach from your last logline attempt.

    I guess I would start with, what does the lead character want?

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