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When career tramps, a yachtsman and an ex-actress team up swindling the jet set, revenge threatens when his ex-wife arrives working undercover for the IRS
When his ex-wife shows up in south beach, a career grifter and his partner's plan to con billionaire twins is jeopardized unless he can find a way to get rid of her.
When his ex-wife shows up in south beach, a career grifter and his partner’s plan to con billionaire twins is jeopardized unless he can find a way to get rid of her.
See lessAfter shy high school girl’heart treatment goes wrong and as result she develops supernatural ability of mind control,she must fight to expose the doctor who caused her transformation
You need a bigger goal than just to expose the doctor. ?What is the doctors plan? What is his purpose for his experiments? Stopping his plan should be the goal, how about this: ----------------------------------------------------- "After she is tricked into an experimental treatment by a ruthless doRead more
You need a bigger goal than just to expose the doctor. ?What is the doctors plan? What is his purpose for his experiments? Stopping his plan should be the goal, how about this:
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“After she is tricked into an experimental treatment by a ruthless doctor, a shy student must use her new found abilities to take down the evil scientist and stop his plan to take over the world.”
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Obviously I don’t know what the doctor plans are in your story’s are so in my logline I used the more generic “Take over the world” so your logline would be different in that respect; but the general idea of the logline would be the same
Hope that helped
See lessWHEN IS WINTER – After all clocks mysteriously stop and the stars begin moving randomly, a terminally ill U.S. President is elected to lead the earth out of the chaos thats growing in a world that can’t tell time.
I don't really 'get' this story. Lead character: US president Inciting incident: Time goes wonky We are good so far. What I don't get, 1:What do you mean by, lead the earth out of chaos? Does that mean he will solve the 'time' problem; or does it mean he must get people to stop panicking? 2: Stars cRead more
I don’t really ‘get’ this story.
Lead character: US president
Inciting incident: Time goes wonky
We are good so far.
What I don’t get,
1:What do you mean by, lead the earth out of chaos? Does that mean he will solve the ‘time’ problem; or does it mean he must get people to stop panicking?
2: Stars can’t move randomly, In fact we do not get the light (What we see as the star) in many cases for thousands, even millions of years. So we see the star ‘a million years ago’
So I think what we need when it comes to improving this logline
1: Drop the bit about stars moving randomly
2: Give us a special skill the new President has to indicate ‘why him’
3: We need a specific goal, He must destroy a time thief. He must go on a quest to find the ‘universal clock’. He must build a time regulator… because just saying, “lead the earth out of chaos” is vague, the story would be how he leads the earth out of chaos.
Hope that helped
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