1. Posted: March 25, 2017In:

    action,comedy about incurious uber driver tries to save his life and his car after picking up a young incompetent terrorist wanted to explode a bomb in a central court.

    Richiev Singularity

    In this logline attempt you have given us the situation, but you have left out what the driver must do. "When his ride share client turns out to be a terrorist, an Uber driver has sixty minutes to..." (Then tell us what he must do)

    In this logline attempt you have given us the situation, but you have left out what the driver must do.

    “When his ride share client turns out to be a terrorist, an Uber driver has sixty minutes to…” (Then tell us what he must do)

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  2. Posted: March 24, 2017In:

    2nd attempt : A carefree, rebellious writer?s life changes suddenly when a long-lost friend pops up at his door. A gripping journey of two friends, one with an abused childhood, the other burdened with false accusations, discovering their true path amongst rigid societal expectations of manliness.

    Richiev Singularity

    You have described a situation, For this to be a story the lead character needs a goal.

    You have described a situation, For this to be a story the lead character needs a goal.

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  3. Posted: March 23, 2017In:

    CIUDAD DE LOS ANGELES OSCUROS (CITY OF DARK ANGELS) When a peace loving man?s loved ones are murdered by a marauding gang of vampires he is forced to control the bloodlust tasted by the secret uncontrollable demon he unleashes to exact revenge

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    Richiev Singularity

    "When his family is murdered by a pack of vampires, a pacifist reverts to his former self an unleashes a demon, turning the hunters into the hunted."

    “When his family is murdered by a pack of vampires, a pacifist reverts to his former self an unleashes a demon, turning the hunters into the hunted.”

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