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When he discovers the CIA are controlling the public through the media, a sensationalist conspiracy vlogger must decipher their hidden messages to stop their nefarious plans.
Conceptually this is great. Everyone is talking about fake news and media manipulation and both sides believe it is the other side that is doing it. So right out of the headlines.However, as for the logline, I would simply ask, is there a personal reason why it is important to the journalist must suRead more
Conceptually this is great. Everyone is talking about fake news and media manipulation and both sides believe it is the other side that is doing it. So right out of the headlines.
However, as for the logline, I would simply ask, is there a personal reason why it is important to the journalist must succeed that the audience can grab on to? If so, I would add it to the logline.
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I agree about the goal... As for the inciting incident, it seems like joining the Yoga class is the inciting incident. There was a movie called. 'Shall we dance'. (I believe the Japanese version was the better of the two) Where a proper and uptight business man joins a ballroom dancing class. EverytRead more
I agree about the goal…
As for the inciting incident, it seems like joining the Yoga class is the inciting incident.
There was a movie called. ‘Shall we dance’. (I believe the Japanese version was the better of the two) Where a proper and uptight business man joins a ballroom dancing class. Everything is going normal and then he joins the class and his perspective begins to change.
See lessWhen hunting season nears for the 20th time in his career, a miserable assassin enrolls in his pregnant wife?s yoga and pilates class to rediscover a desire to kill.
dpg, I would agree about the goal... however the story shouldn't be changed too far or it will lose it's uniqueness. The 'one last hit' so the lead can retire is alright for a normal story idea, however as I read this logline, it appears to be, "City Slickers" but with an assassin.The lead must rediRead more
dpg, I would agree about the goal… however the story shouldn’t be changed too far or it will lose it’s uniqueness. The ‘one last hit’ so the lead can retire is alright for a normal story idea, however as I read this logline, it appears to be, “City Slickers” but with an assassin.
The lead must rediscover his love of killing the same way the lead in city slickers must rediscover his smile.
So you have the makings of a dark comedy.
There is probably a leader board for “The Season.” The lead probably has a rival assassin. The lead used to be the number one assassin every year. Now the lead is just going through the motions.
Maybe the rival is a young kid who is getting all the hype. The Justin Bieber of assassins.
All the assassin groupies love ‘the kid’ but while he has flash, he has no technique and no respect for the game.
So you have the lead character who is ‘old school’ and near the top of the leader board but has lost his love for the game.
and you have the ‘kid’ who is leading everyone in ‘the season’ but is messy.
And in between the killings the assassin is going to yoga class with an odd assortment of quirky characters. All of whom have an enjoyment of life. Who embrace life. And through that experience he learns to become one with himself, enjoy life and rediscover his love of killing….
of course this is just extrapolation on my part…
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