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A civil war tears a family of gods apart causing banishment to their child who is sent to earth to learn to control her powers with the help of a young story writer who one day helps her defeat her corrupt sister.
This is sort of like the movie 'Thor' except with two battling sisters instead of two battling brothers My first question is, who is the lead character? From the way the logline is written it could be the 'child' or it could be the 'story writer' I would choose one or the other for the focus of theRead more
This is sort of like the movie ‘Thor’ except with two battling sisters instead of two battling brothers
My first question is, who is the lead character? From the way the logline is written it could be the ‘child’ or it could be the ‘story writer’
I would choose one or the other for the focus of the logline.
Hope that helped
See lessAn angel living as a human being is brutalized by the police and now humanity must fight for its survival.
"...Humanity must fight for it's survival" ----- You should have one specific character who must complete one specific trial, in order to save humanity. Having the lead character be, 'humanity' which after the inciting incident, 'must fight for survival' does not draw in the reader. There is a quoteRead more
“…Humanity must fight for it’s survival”
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You should have one specific character who must complete one specific trial, in order to save humanity.
Having the lead character be, ‘humanity’ which after the inciting incident, ‘must fight for survival’ does not draw in the reader.
There is a quote, “Kill one person, it’s a tragedy, kill a million and it’s a statistic.” (Generally attributed to Joseph Stalin) For that reason;
Focus your story on one human and one goal to save humanity instead of the entire human race and your logline will draw in the reader.
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
See lessA tough social worker takes fighting women’s rights into her own hands but can she put her cultural, religious and family obligations aside to fight for herself.
You should take Nir's advice, it's solid. Also, I believe from reading this logline you are trying to say, the lead character fights for women to stand up for themselves but her own personal life is a mess and she isn't taking her own advice, giving us a bit of Irony... I could be wrong about that.Read more
You should take Nir’s advice, it’s solid.
Also, I believe from reading this logline you are trying to say, the lead character fights for women to stand up for themselves but her own personal life is a mess and she isn’t taking her own advice, giving us a bit of Irony… I could be wrong about that.
If that is the case, it should be written clearer in the logline.
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