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After being assaulted by his family and the Christian community for being homosexual, a victim of sex abuse is driven to commit suicide.
It means you have told us the entire story and we don't need to watch the movie :( The logline should give us an incident that get's it going, (Presumably the lead getting assaulted) give us a lead character (A gay youth) And then give us the goal of the lead character (?) It shouldn't give away theRead more
It means you have told us the entire story and we don’t need to watch the movie 🙁
The logline should give us an incident that get’s it going, (Presumably the lead getting assaulted) give us a lead character (A gay youth) And then give us the goal of the lead character (?)
It shouldn’t give away the ending. (The lead character commits suicide)
So you have a good portion of the logine but you haven’t told us the lead characters goal- and have given away the ending.
See lessAfter being assaulted by his family and the Christian community for being homosexual, a victim of sex abuse is driven to commit suicide.
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See lessWhen a troubled American expatriate is offered work at the Tengen Hotel, he soon discovers that Tokyo’s most exclusive hotel is also the base of operations for a major crime syndicate. Now embroiled in their conspiracy to appropriate control over the city, the expatriate must choose between duty or sentiment as both his mettle and loyalty are put to the test.
This isn't bad, but here is the weak part of the latest attempt. ----- ...the expatriate must choose between duty or sentiment as both his mettle and loyalty are put to the test. ----- Duty? As a bartender. He must choose between serving drinks (His duty) or working for the underground? Sentiment? YRead more
This isn’t bad, but here is the weak part of the latest attempt.
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…the expatriate must choose between duty or sentiment as both his mettle and loyalty are put to the test.
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Duty? As a bartender. He must choose between serving drinks (His duty) or working for the underground?
Sentiment? You haven’t given us a clue to what he is sentimental about so this doesn’t work either.
However I believe you are on the right track, I think you will get it.
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