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"When an uptight accountant agrees to spend Christmas with his fiance' and her parents, he ends up in the last place he would ever want to be, a new age hippy commune, and must learn to accept their free spirit lifestyle or escape and risk losing his future bride."
Good points FFF, I do think the logline would be stronger without he ends up in the last place he would ever want to be? I was debating whether to add that line or not.
Good points FFF, I do think the logline would be stronger without he ends up in the last place he would ever want to be? I was debating whether to add that line or not.
See lessTwo of the biggest little horror icons battle it out when Chucky (from Child's Play) double crosses The Leprechaun by stealing his gold, finally picking a fight with someone his own size.
"When Chucky steals the leprechaun's pot of gold, he becomes the hunted and must destroy the evil Irish icon or die trying."
“When Chucky steals the leprechaun’s pot of gold, he becomes the hunted and must destroy the evil Irish icon or die trying.”
See lessAfter a young insecure girl, who lost her boyfriend by an accident, is sending a naked video to a strange men which is causing bullying attacks at school, she is moving to a new town to build friendships, but the cyber attacks continue and increase her depression.
young insecure girl -- Insecure teen (You say 'she' later on so you don't need to say girl) who lost her boyfriend by an accident,-- When her boyfriend dies (Don't need to tell us by accident) is sending -- Sends a naked video to a strange men -- begins sexting random men (A bit more colloquial) whiRead more
young insecure girl — Insecure teen (You say ‘she’ later on so you don’t need to say girl)
who lost her boyfriend by an accident,– When her boyfriend dies (Don’t need to tell us by accident)
is sending — Sends
a naked video to a strange men — begins sexting random men (A bit more colloquial)
which is causing bullying attacks at school — (This whole part should either be changed or used as the inciting incident) (Such as, When an insecure teen becomes the target of bulling after her sexting video goes viral)
she is moving- she moves
to a new town to build friendship (Transfers to a new school)
but the cyber attacks continue (but the cyber bullying continues)
and increase her depression. (Drop this, she needs a pro-active goal)
Hope that helps, good luck with this!
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